Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hello Jackson,

I am writing this letter to express my gratitude against the things i learnt as being the part of your department. Currently i have gained a plenty of experience in variety of skills. Since, I joined your department i got opportuniy to engage with customers, colleagues, which facilitate to develop my communication skills, team work, cofidence and also made me enable to deal with hassels in smart way without feeling frustrate.

I would really thankful if you are going to assist me in moving to a another department. As being recuiter i have desired to be a senior generalist in your organisation. Actually, I require your feedback and reference letter to support my performance while working under your supervision.It will really helpful for me to enhance my career opportunity.

Elaborating why i do not want to replace this company, as this organisation has numerous positivie aspects. Predominantly, the environment of this organisation is very supportative and admirable.In addition, the collegueas are extremely amible and generous. Since working here, I do not only developed my professional skills but also build a strong relationship with team members and customers.

I hope you will consider my request and will act upon it.

your sincerly,

Mrs. Khosa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, successfully covering what has been learned in the present job, suggesting company benefits, and explaining the desire to stay within the company. However, some aspects are developed more fully than others. For instance, the explanation of what has been learned is slightly repetitive regarding communication skills and confidence, and the suggestion of how the company benefits focuses mainly on personal career progression rather than broader organisational advantages. The tone is generally appropriate for a semi-formal workplace request, fulfilling the communicative purpose adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, where each paragraph corresponds to a distinct prompt requirement. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'In addition' and 'Since working here', though some referencing is occasionally faulty or mechanical, such as 'Elaborating why i do not want to replace this company'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving smoothly from past learning to future career moves and reasons for staying, which meets the requirements of the band fully and shows glimpses of clearer overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts to use less common lexical items such as 'gratitude', 'organisation', and 'amiable'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation, such as writing 'recuiter' instead of 'recruiter', 'supportative' instead of 'supportive', and 'collegueas' instead of 'colleagues'. Awkward collocations like 'express my gratitude against the things' also appear. These errors do not impede communication, but they reflect a limited and developing range of vocabulary appropriate for this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and participial clauses like 'Since, I joined your department i got opportuniy to engage...'. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing articles ('got opportuniy', 'support performance'), incorrect prepositions ('gratitude against'), and faulty tense usage ('I would really thankful'). Punctuation slips, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, are also present. These errors require some effort from the reader to interpret, though meaning is generally preserved.

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