Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear manager,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to ask about working in the quality assurance department at our company.

I wanted to let you know that I started my journey as a quality control assistant 2 years ago. I would be grateful to have learned media preparation, colony counting, water testing, and documentation under your guidance. I kindly request that you permit me to work in another department as a quality assurance assistant. I assure you that I will give my best performance and provide accurate data records and results.

Recently, I received a job offer letter from another company for a quality assurance position. But I do not wish to leave the company because I have learned many things from this company, and the environment is very professional and supportive.

I look forward to your response. Please let me know if you need any further information.

Yours sincerely,

Almas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by mentioning what has been learned in the present job, suggesting the benefits of a departmental move, and explaining the desire to stay within the same company. However, some bullet points are handled with varying degrees of depth. For instance, the benefit to the company is touched upon through a general promise to 'provide accurate data records and results,' but this idea is somewhat under-developed rather than fully expanded with specific departmental synergies. Additionally, the transition regarding the outside job offer feels a bit abrupt and slightly impacts the natural flow of the explanation. To reach a higher standard, all ideas would need fuller extension and sharper focus on the employer's operational advantages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement and follows a clear, conventional layout for workplace correspondence, moving appropriately from an opening greeting to the core request, supporting reasons, and a polite sign-off. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate the introduction, background details, external context, and conclusion. However, cohesion at times feels a little mechanical or repetitive in transitions, such as the reliance on basic connective patterns. Referencing is generally clear, but smoother linking words would enhance the progression of ideas and provide a more natural, unified flow across sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

The writing demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for a professional request, successfully incorporating industry-specific terms such as 'media preparation,' 'colony counting,' 'water testing,' and 'quality assurance assistant.' There are some successful attempts to use less common vocabulary, alongside minor inaccuracies in word choice or phrasing—such as 'I would be grateful to have learned' rather than a more natural expression of completed experience. Spelling and word choice errors are minimal and never impede communication, allowing the reader to easily grasp the intended message throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The response employs a functional mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating control over standard structures like conditional and subordinate clauses, as seen in sentences such as 'Please let me know if you need any further information.' There are some errors in grammar and tense selection—notably 'I would be grateful to have learned' when referring to past skills acquired over the last two years—but these errors rarely impede communication. Punctuation and basic sentence boundaries are handled correctly, allowing the text to remain accessible and largely accurate for the reader.

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