Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I hope your doing well,

I am writing this letter to you for move to different department in same company.

Firstly, i learn many things from my present job like communication skills, how deals with employees and customers or dealers.

Furthermore, a company can get more benefits if I move to other departments because I am working from last two years. So, I know everything about company like where from get more profit and where company going losses I know these all things about company. You can interest on me.

However, I do not want to leave this company because company gives many things and it’s also set the my future. This company provides many employees benefits and also gives bonus at end of the year and gives good salary. I have very good bounding with other employees.

I request you accept my letter.

Your faithful,

Husanpreet Kaur,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points and make your purpose clear: you want to move departments while remaining with the company. You mention learning communication skills and how to deal with employees and customers, and you explain that the company offers benefits, a bonus, and a good salary, alongside your relationships with colleagues. The benefit to the company is less fully explained: knowing where it makes profits or losses is relevant, but the connection between that knowledge and how you would contribute in a new department remains unclear. Develop this with a specific example of a skill or insight you could apply there. A more explicit, professional request would also make your position clearer and more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens with the request, then covers what you have learned, the company’s potential benefit, and your reasons for staying. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these main points, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “However” show the intended progression. Some connections are mechanical, though, and the profit-and-loss explanation repeats the idea that you know the company without clearly linking it to a practical contribution. The closing request is also abrupt. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and finish with a courteous sentence that refers directly to the proposed transfer. This would make the progression smoother and the relationships between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main message, with relevant terms such as “communication skills,” “employees,” “customers,” “bonus,” and “salary.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural, which reduces precision. For example, “You can interest on me” does not clearly express confidence in your suitability, while “good bounding” appears to mean a positive relationship with colleagues. “Where company going losses” is also an unclear way to describe areas making losses. Choose more precise workplace language, such as “contribute to the department,” “strong working relationships,” and “areas operating at a loss.” Vary repeated general words such as “company” and “gives” where possible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use a mixture of short statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand your main points. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For instance, “I learn many things” needs a past-tense form, and “how deals with employees” is missing a subject and an appropriate verb structure. In “I am working from last two years,” the tense and time expression need correction. There are also errors in “it’s also set the my future” and “I request you accept my letter.” Practise forming accurate clauses after phrases such as “I have learned” and “I would like to request,” while checking articles and punctuation. More accurate control would make the letter sound more professional.

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