Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir/madam

I am writing this letter to request a transfer to a different department within the company.

I have been working with the customer service department for two years now. During this time i have learned to communicate well with the customers solve problems quickly and work as part of the team. I believe this skills have helped me perform my job very well.

And i would like to move to the marketing department because i am very interested in advertising and social media. I think the company would benefit from my transfer because i already know our products and costumers very well. I can use this experience to help create marketing campaigns and bring new ideas to the team.

I do not wish to leave the company because i am happy here and i want to grow with the company. I believe that moving to a new department will help my career to develop more and allow me to contribute more.

I would be grateful if you consider my request. I am available to discuss this with you at anytime.

Yours sincerely,

Michael

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three points and maintains a clear, appropriate purpose: you request a transfer, describe skills gained in customer service, explain how product knowledge could support marketing, and state that you want to continue growing within the company. The examples about solving customer problems and contributing to campaigns make the request relevant and reasonably supported. The explanation of what you learned is clear, though it could be developed further with a specific example of a skill or achievement from your two years in the role. Likewise, explaining why you prefer this company over other employers would make that point more persuasive. Overall, the task is covered effectively, with some ideas more general than fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: it opens with the request, describes your current experience, presents the proposed move, and closes with your reasons and a polite next step. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow each part of the task, and links such as “During this time,” “because,” and “I believe” make relationships between ideas clear. The organisation is effective overall, although beginning a paragraph with “And” is less suitable in this formal letter and makes the transition slightly mechanical. You could also connect the learning paragraph more directly to the marketing proposal, showing how those skills would transfer. The closing is appropriate and gives the manager a clear opportunity to respond.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes relevant workplace terms such as “customer service department,” “marketing department,” “marketing campaigns,” and “contribute.” These choices make your request easy to understand. However, the range is somewhat general, and several phrases could be more precise or professional: “learned to communicate well” and “bring new ideas” do not specify the particular skills or contribution you offer. There are also spelling errors in “costumers” and “anytime”; the intended forms are “customers” and “any time.” More specific language about customer insights, campaign planning, or transferable skills would add flexibility and precision while preserving the clear tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason-and-result structure in “I think the company would benefit from my transfer because…” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, but some errors remain. For example, “i” should be capitalised as “I,” and “I believe this skills” has a subject–noun agreement error; use “these skills.” In “I would be grateful if you consider my request,” the conditional form should be “if you would consider” or, more naturally, “if you would consider my request.” The sentence listing what you learned also needs clearer punctuation between the actions. Careful editing of agreement, conditional forms, capitalisation, and punctuation would improve accuracy.

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