Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to request you to change my department. Last year I learned the skills of Accountancy and get good score in that with your cooperation and guidance so I am thinking to grab a better opportunity in my company.

Currently I am working as a Clerk in my company and learn so many things which not only helps me my career development but also assist me how to become accurate in calculations in limited time. At this post I learn managing data of company as well as making reports with the help of digital gadgets.

If I move to other department it would be benefical for the company because now I am able to organise things effectively. Moreover, I would gain new experience and become more versatile, which would allow me to take on additional responsibilities in the future.

Furthermore, I do not prefer to leave the company because I value the work environment, appreciate the support of my colleagues, and believe there are still opportunities for professional growth within the company.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you describe learning accountancy, data management and report writing; explain that your organisational ability could benefit another department; and give clear reasons for staying, including the work environment and colleagues’ support. The request is also apparent from the opening. However, some points are less fully developed than others. The benefit to the company is mainly stated as being able to “organise things effectively,” without identifying a department or showing how your existing skills would meet its needs. The account of what you learned is relevant but could be linked more explicitly to your suitability for the proposed move. A more specific request and one concrete example of the value you could bring would make the purpose more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a coherent sequence: the request and background come first, followed by your current duties, the company’s potential benefit, and your reason for remaining. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and transitions such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” make the relationships between ideas clear. This already gives the letter a generally smooth progression. To make the organisation more flexible and precise, connect the opening more directly to the later explanation of your skills, and avoid relying mainly on additive transitions. For example, the account of your current responsibilities could lead into a specific proposal for the department you hope to join. A suitable closing sentence would also give the letter a more complete, conventional structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the purpose, including relevant workplace terms such as “Accountancy,” “managing data,” “making reports,” “versatile,” and “additional responsibilities.” These choices communicate your experience and motivation, and some less common language is attempted. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “grab a better opportunity,” “good score in that,” and “digital gadgets.” “Benefical” is also misspelled, and “at this post” is not the most natural expression for describing your current role. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and professional tone. Prefer standard workplace phrasing, such as “pursue an opportunity,” “achieved good results,” and “digital tools.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response includes both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example the sentence beginning “If I move to other department” and the final sentence explaining why you wish to stay. Meaning is generally clear, and the longer structures show an attempt to express relationships between ideas. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms and sentence construction: “I learned … and get good score” shifts tense, while “Currently I am working … and learn” does not maintain a consistent verb form. In “helps me my career development,” the sentence pattern is incomplete, and “If I move to other department” needs an article. Review tense consistency when describing past learning versus current duties, and check articles and verb patterns in complex sentences.

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