Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This is because the famous people are will known in the socity,in the sence that everybody knows them,so it will draw more views for the photographers and gives them more followers,the famous person sometime as the photographers to take their picture and post it

in some case the photographers do not take permission from them before taking it this is because they want to use the photo to make money and build them selfs

while some photographer as them before taking it

in my own way i think that famous people enjoy the attension people give to them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response touches on both sides: it says photographers can gain views and followers, and notes that some take pictures without permission while others ask first. It also gives a personal view that famous people enjoy the attention. However, the discussion is very limited and does not clearly explain the public’s interest in celebrities’ lives or why following them may be wrong, such as the effects on privacy and safety. The opinion is stated but not supported with reasons or examples, and the response does not develop a clear answer to all parts of the prompt. The required minimum of 250 words is not met. To improve, explain each viewpoint, support your position with a relevant example, and make your conclusion clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence of ideas: the response first mentions photographers gaining attention, then contrasts taking pictures with and without permission, and ends with a personal opinion. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the ideas are crowded into one paragraph and the links between them are not always clear. For example, “in some case” and “while some photographer” introduce contrasts, but the relationship between these points is not fully explained. The opening also begins with “This is because” without a preceding idea to refer to. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each point with clear transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “photographers,” “permission,” “followers,” and “attention,” so the main topic is generally understandable. It also attempts to express ideas about gaining an audience and making money. However, the vocabulary is limited and some word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “will known” for “well-known,” “socity” for “society,” and “attension” for “attention.” Phrases such as “build them selfs” are unclear and do not express the intended idea naturally. Broaden the vocabulary for privacy, public interest, and media behaviour, and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help explain the arguments rather than repeating basic references to photographers and famous people.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “everybody knows them, so it will draw more views for the photographers,” and uses a contrast with “while.” These attempts show some ability to link clauses. However, sentence control is inconsistent: “the famous person sometime as the photographers” lacks a correctly formed verb, and “the famous people are will known” combines incompatible verb forms. There are also problems with agreement and sentence boundaries, including the long opening sequence joined mainly by commas. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking that each has a clear subject and verb, then practise accurate complex structures with “because,” “although,” and “while.”

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