Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Fame has introduce new challenges for individuals such as actors, comedians and politicians whom are continously followed by proffessional photographers where ever they go. Moreover, famous actors have huge following and people are interested in their perosnal lives and fashion trends they follow. However, some argue that professional photographers should maintain a distance and respect the privacy of famous people.

People are so interested in the personal lives of famous individuals which motivates the proffessional photographers to follow celebrities. For examples, famous football players like Cristinao Ronaldo has following in millions and people are crazy to just get a picture with him. Fasion trends followed by the famous people also attracts the attention of the public because people want to adapt to the latest trends around the world including clothes , glassess and shoes. Furthermore, companies hire famous individuals for commercial marketing of their product to target the public which also peaks the interest of people.

Famous people face certain hardships when they go out to places like market or any government office, because photographers are continously following them and are not respecting their privacy. Moreover, continous following of celebrities by professional phtographers not only impact them but also their families as well. For example, a famous celebrity was going to coffee shop with her baby and suddenly photographers started taking here photos and in panic baby fell and that celebrity was seen crying in the coffee shop which again became news of the hour.

In conclusion, love which people have for the celebrities is the main reason which makes them interested in their lives. Although privacy should be respected and certian boundries should not be crossed when famous people are going out with their families.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear preference for respecting celebrities’ privacy, especially in the conclusion. The public-interest side is supported with examples about Ronaldo’s followers, fashion trends and commercial marketing, while the coffee-shop incident illustrates the harm caused by intrusive photography. These points are relevant, but some are more fully explained than others: the discussion of public interest lists reasons without exploring why that interest justifies photographers’ actions, and the final opinion could be stated more directly and developed beyond the need to respect boundaries. To strengthen the response, explain the distinction between legitimate public interest and intrusive pursuit, then connect that distinction explicitly to your own position throughout the essay. The response covers the task, though its ideas are not equally developed or fully clarified.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement: the introduction presents the issue, the two body paragraphs discuss the opposing views, and the conclusion returns to privacy. Paragraphing helps the reader follow the main stages of the argument, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” make relationships between ideas visible. However, some connections feel mechanical, and the first body paragraph moves from fans wanting photographs to fashion and then advertising without clearly showing how each point supports the central argument. The conclusion also begins with public interest but ends with privacy, so the relationship between these ideas could be made clearer. Use more precise transitions and topic sentences, and make references such as “which” unambiguous, to create smoother progression between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “personal lives,” “privacy,” “commercial marketing” and “target the public,” which helps communicate the main ideas. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “hardships” and “boundaries.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable, including “continously,” “proffessional,” “perosnal,” “Fasion” and “peaks” where “piques” is intended. Some phrasing is also imprecise or unnatural, such as “huge following” and “love which people have for the celebrities.” These issues do not prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and fluency. Proofread carefully and learn common collocations—for example, “a large following,” “public fascination with celebrities,” and “intrusive photography”—to express your points more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and most of the argument remains understandable. Some grammatical errors occur, however, particularly with agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “Cristinao Ronaldo has following” needs an article, and “Fasion trends … attracts” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “a famous celebrity was going … and suddenly photographers started,” the sequence of actions would be clearer with more controlled clause structure; “taking here photos” also shows a pronoun-form error. The opening phrase “Fame has introduce” likewise needs the correct verb form. Review agreement, articles and pronouns, and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentence attempts easier to follow.

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