Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Today renowed personalities are hired the photographs for professional photos. According to some people, it is a benefical for them but others are opposite of this view. I will discuss the both side and also give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.
On the one side, professional photographers have experience how to capture the moment and what are right and wrong shorts. Infact, people become more updated by ideal one. For instance, Moni Raw who famous actress , is always going out with their team. She like to capture the every moment and also post on social sites to give update their fans for her life.
On the other hand, I and some individual personally that some time famous people also loss their privacy and it also give them mentally stress. Even sometime they will enjoy their important moment in the freedom fully way as they know if they doing any bad or stupid think, it will totally impact on their career. While many media will also lik private photos which spoil their entire career.
In conclusion, celeberties should only invite the professional photographers in special moments but if they will going out to enjoy their own time, I think they should not go with the professional photographers. If they hide their private life more they take less stress.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, which is a requirement of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts the depth of the discussion. The arguments regarding privacy and professional photography are relevant but remain superficial. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific examples to ensure the response meets the length requirement and fully explores the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'On the one side' and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the use of linking words is repetitive or mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the actress example and the broader argument about professional photography is not fully articulated. Improving the variety of transition signals would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'renowed' for 'renowned', 'benefical' for 'beneficial', and 'shorts' for 'shots'. There is also some awkward phrasing, such as 'hired the photographs'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and ensuring correct spelling of common academic and descriptive terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'it is a benefical for them', 'I and some individual personally that some time famous people also loss their privacy', and 'if they will going out'. These errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, are noticeable and occasionally make the text difficult to follow. To improve, you should practice using a wider variety of complex sentence structures and focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb forms and prepositions.
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