Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this advance era, Influencers and media industry people live their best lives. When they go everywhere, they must have their professional photographers. And as they are famous for their work people interested in their lives which is not a good choice. However, some people think that why professional photographers are always follow famous people?

Careers are based on what they want or what they need in their lives. There are many professional careers like Doctors, Engineers, Teachers and etc, but moslty people chooses photographery industries. They follow famous influcers so that they promote their works as well as paying excellent income. As photographers paied muvh money to enhaance their skills so they charged based on their famous personalities. For instance, in India, people are interested in cliking photos of famous celebrities. They feel very uncomfortable, however, they just quite their mouths because they are celebrities.

On the other hand, if celebrities or famous influencers were hired professional photographers that is their choice. They captured their photos in a very proferssional way, so the celebrities gain much popularities. In addition, influencers posted their reels and pictures on socialmedia applications like Instagram, Facebook, Tiktoks, and many more apps to earn money in dollars. For example, if they did not hireprofessional photographers people in other countries judged them by their unprofessional looks. And did not hire for the advertisment in their company.

In conclusion, famous people have their own peofessional photographers for their handsome salary. It is a digital era, everybody earn by using social media appications. And ofcourse, because of them we will find anything from Instagram, and other applications easily. They promoted in a very significant way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention that some people find the constant photography intrusive, the explanation is somewhat disjointed. The argument regarding why celebrities hire photographers is clearer, but the connection to the prompt's core tension—the ethics of paparazzi versus the public's interest—is often lost. Your own opinion is present but could be more explicitly stated in the introduction and conclusion to ensure a clear position throughout. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea and supports it with a logical explanation rather than listing examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression between sentences is often weak. For example, the transition from discussing professional careers to the photography industry feels abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'And ofcourse' or 'And did not hire'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to determine who 'they' refers to in certain sentences. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'advance era' instead of 'advanced era', 'cliking' instead of 'clicking', and 'quite their mouths' instead of 'keep their mouths shut'. You attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'influencers' and 'advertisement', which is good, but the range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your spelling is accurate, as repeated errors in basic vocabulary can distract the reader from your arguments.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('moslty people chooses'), incorrect verb tenses ('photographers paied muvh money'), and awkward phrasing ('if celebrities or famous influencers were hired professional photographers that is their choice'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, practice using a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, and proofread carefully to correct basic errors in tense and agreement.

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