Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Earlier only the film actors were famous and photographed by professional photographers but now a days other people like vloggers, comedians and influencers are very famous and covered by photographers. These photographers cover their lives using photos and show their famous things shows to public and a huge number of people are interested in their lives. They promote various products in their photos which is an easy way to advertise their products according to the companies. People learn about new fashion easily by following the photos of famous people. Some famous people show many things like how they started their professional life from a small start which inspires youngsters that how they can build their life from a small startup. The hard work, time and money they invested to become successful in their life and youngste

On the other side, there are some people those think that following famous people for photos is wrong. Sometimes these photographers capture really wrong moments which makes those famous people uncomfortable and have negative impact on kids and public. Because they post everything regardless of its impacts. They also have their private lives but these photographers do not let them enjoy their private moments. If ninety percent their life is for public ten percent is their private, they should let them enjoy it. Also, some small influencers try to copy them and do a lot of expense without even earning which results economic problems in their family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is uneven. While you mention the benefits of celebrity photography (advertising, fashion, inspiration), the second paragraph is less developed and ends abruptly mid-sentence, which negatively impacts the overall task completion. Furthermore, you failed to state your own opinion clearly, which is a requirement of the prompt. The response is also under the 250-word minimum, which limits your ability to fully explore the complexities of the topic. To improve, ensure you dedicate equal space to both viewpoints, provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction, and ensure your conclusion explicitly states your personal stance on the issue.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into two main paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the other side' and 'Also', but the transitions between sentences are often mechanical. The lack of a formal introduction and a clear conclusion makes the overall structure feel incomplete. Additionally, the abrupt ending of the first paragraph ('youngste') suggests a lack of careful planning or proofreading. To improve, use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'famous people' and 'photographers', and use basic descriptors like 'famous things' or 'really wrong moments'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'do a lot of expense', which should be 'incur high expenses'. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to media, privacy, and public interest, and focus on using more sophisticated synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'now a days' should be 'nowadays', and 'ninety percent their life' is missing a preposition ('of'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'results economic problems'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with prepositions, articles, and pluralisation, and try to vary your sentence structures to include more complex, error-free clauses.

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