Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is irrefutable that Capturing a lot of pictures for social media is become a trend in this digital era. According to the notion, In recent scenario, renowned personalities are followed everywhere they go by the professional photographers. Many proponents say that it is good as people are curious to know about lives whilst opponents think that photographers are not doing right things by following famous persons. This essay would discuss both perspectives along with my point of view.
On the one hand, when camera-men go everywhere behind celebrities to capture their photos and videos, public get opportunity to know more about the personal lives of these famous individuals. In other words, fans and public always want to show interest into the lives of such personalities. Moreover, the public is influenced by their life-style, fashion-sense, nature and personality. Thus, with the help of these photoshoot and cameras they capture the moments of famous persons. For example, In India, many photographers can be seen at the Delhi Airport by following famous personalities.
On the other hand, to make film of renowned persons by photographers is a negative action. It interrupt their personal space and boundaries when many photo-shooters follow them all around. Although they are famous, privacy is comfortable and peaceful for them. Hence, they also want some personal time to be with themselves and their loved ones. That is why, It is not good for themselves to be among the people with the cameras in their hands. For instance, many actors and actresses ignore photographers.
In conclusion, after analyzing this essay, It can be reiterated that although famous persons influence and motivate public and people eager to know about their lives , celebrities have their personal life and space to live.
Therefore, photographers should not follow them everywhere they go.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding public interest is supported by a brief example, but the explanation of why this interest exists is repetitive. The conclusion is a bit abrupt and could have better synthesised the main points. To reach a higher band, you should aim to extend your arguments with more depth, perhaps by discussing the ethical implications of media consumption or the economic necessity of celebrity exposure, rather than just stating that people are interested.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in the argument. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'It is not good for themselves to be among the people'. The flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'irrefutable', 'renowned personalities', and 'proponents'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Capturing a lot of pictures... is become a trend' and 'make film of renowned persons'. These errors do not impede communication, but they highlight a need for more precise usage. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word forms (e.g., 'is becoming' instead of 'is become') are grammatically correct.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, such as 'In recent scenario' (missing article), 'It interrupt their personal space' (subject-verb agreement), and 'people eager to know' (missing verb). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To achieve a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and the correct use of articles.
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