Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Due to increasing in technology the whole world is shrunken down into a small village where everything can access easily.Photography is becoming an increasing trends now a days. Many group of thinker opine that celebrities should be follow through their high professional photographs,while other think its a negative solution. I should discussed both the views along with my points in the forthcoming paragraphs.

On one side, many group of thinkers believe that famous persons should be followed through their photographs.This is because due to increasing trend in social media among youth like Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, etc.. and they spend most of their times in this thing and they followed their professional lives by buying a clothes, Sun glasses ,make ups in girls and many more thing. To exemplify further, a recent article published in Times of India that Christiano Ronaldo who is a famous footballer have 250 millions followers on instagram.

On the contrary side, photographs is not only the thing though which the celebraties are being judged.Many fans also follow due to their kind of intrests in their sports like music, dancing, cricket, and football. To cite an example, a famous singer Arijit singh who use to sing romantic songs who is down to earth person and not like to post their lifestyles on social medial but he have his huge fans following because his artistic skills.

According to my opinion, i believe that photographs is not only a thing through which celebraties are judged. Recently, an Famous celebrity of india in bolloywood film industry Sharukh Khan who is promoting ads of tobacco which is injurious to health among young and old people and it also bring negative impacts among child. I think photography through professional photographers is the only way people looks good becuases they use high definition cameras and high editing apps,but this thing can be overlooked .

To sum up, adapting the life of famous people through social media is increasing now a days, but there are many other thing to look around to follow such famous people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention social media influence and artistic talent, the arguments lack depth and logical connection to the prompt's core issue of privacy versus public interest. The opinion provided in the fourth paragraph is slightly confusing, as it shifts focus to celebrity endorsement of tobacco rather than directly addressing the ethics of paparazzi photography. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained point that directly supports your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On the contrary side' is not a standard collocation, and the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'this thing' to refer to complex concepts. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the conclusion, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. Improving the variety and precision of your transition signals would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'shrunken down into a small village' (a misinterpretation of the idiom 'global village') and 'negative solution' (which does not make sense in this context). Additionally, there are frequent spelling and grammatical errors related to word forms, such as 'celebraties' and 'medial'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure you are using words in their correct context rather than relying on repetitive or slightly misused terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'celebrities should be follow', 'he have his huge fans'), article usage, and pluralisation. Some sentences are difficult to parse due to these errors, such as 'I think photography through professional photographers is the only way people looks good'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic grammatical slips prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would be a great starting point for improvement.

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