Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's world of modernization, most of the famous individuals like actors, politicians and singers are followed by photographers everywhere. Some folks say its good due to interest of people in their lives, but some people oppose this statement. This essay will compare and contrast both view along with my opinion which is in favour of former letter.

Initiating with the first school of thought, there is no doubt that famous film stars and directors has great influence on people. Most of the youngster get admire from the actions and dialogs in movies and follow them as a role model. In addition, new clothing design wear by them become famous among the fans as a result they copy it and the sales of various brands got huge rise. Moreover, some actors creats awareness among people about their helth issues and imotivate them to do regular exercise or hit gym to keep themself fit its really positive effect on fans. For example, famous cricketer Virat Kohli is so dedicated towards fitness that most of youngster follow him and get influenced from his hardwork and want to become successfull like him.

On the other hand some people oppose this and say says that it effects the personal life of famous people like they cannot enjoy the privacy in their life because followed everywhere

by photographers to get some pictures to post in magazines or newspaper so that their sales will increase. Sometime extensive following of person is also bad and cause serious threat to their life. For instance paparazzi follows a famous daughter of Queen elizabeth leads to death loss of life.

In conclusion, I think its benifitial to provide details about superstar life to their fans. But it should not be extensive that it may cause threat to them. Some limites should be implemented for photographers so that some sort of privacy should be given to them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of celebrities on youth and the privacy concerns regarding paparazzi. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The argument regarding the benefits of celebrity coverage is better supported than the counter-argument, which relies on a single, slightly vague example regarding the late Princess Diana. To reach a higher band, the essay would benefit from more nuanced exploration of why the public interest in celebrities might be considered a 'good thing' beyond just fitness inspiration, and a more detailed analysis of the ethical implications of photography.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each viewpoint, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'former letter' in the introduction, which is an incorrect usage. Paragraphing is generally appropriate, but the flow between sentences within the second body paragraph is slightly disjointed due to punctuation errors and run-on structures. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear enough to follow without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'modernization', 'awareness', and 'privacy'. However, there are several spelling errors ('benifitial', 'imotivate', 'creats', 'helth', 'limites') and some awkward collocations ('death loss of life', 'get admire'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the range and precision of the language. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and expanding their repertoire of academic collocations to move beyond basic descriptive terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('stars and directors has', 'youngster get admire', 'sales... got huge rise') and punctuation, particularly with run-on sentences that lack proper full stops. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent grammatical errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. The student should focus on proofreading for basic agreement rules and ensuring that complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid run-on structures, which currently detract from the overall fluency of the text.

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