Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this modern era, photography has more evolved and modernized due to this well-known people are photographed by professional photographers everyplace they visit. Some public believe that this is a positive thing because people wants to know things in their lives. While others think that photographers should not follow famous people. Both the views and opinion will be discussed further.
Examining the former view that professional photographers take pictures of famous people at everywhere. The prime reason is that photographers can earn money by clicking photos of popular people. For instance, they can published famous people photos with their live updates what they are doing, also public is interested in watching famous people lives updates because of this, professional photographers are follow celebrities.
On the contrary, latter view suggest that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. The primary reason is that popular person lost his privacy when he comes out in the public places due to this they become image conscious and they can not enjoy openly in the public area. For example, photographers capture all the things they do in the public space and this makes them uncomfortable and safety issue.
Finally, in my opinion, I firmly support the second view. The main justification is that photographers can not photographed famous people everywhere they go, for just money and famous people have rights to have privacy but they hardly get a chance to hide their things from general people because of professional photographers.
To conclude that, there are many supporters of famous people being photographed by professional photographers is a good thing but my arguments prove that not following the popular individuals by photographers is a appropriate deal with the situation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, including both views and a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the argument regarding the public's interest is stated but not fully explored, and the point about 'safety issues' in the third paragraph is mentioned without sufficient elaboration or concrete examples. While the position is consistent throughout, the supporting arguments lack the depth required for a higher band score. The essay remains relevant, but the analysis of the issues is somewhat superficial.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'In this modern era', 'On the contrary', and 'Finally', but these are sometimes used mechanically or with slight inaccuracies in phrasing. Referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences within paragraphs can be a bit disjointed. The conclusion is present but slightly repetitive in its phrasing. Overall, the progression of ideas is evident, but the use of cohesive devices could be more natural and varied to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'photography has more evolved', 'clicking photos', and 'appropriate deal with the situation'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and repeats words like 'famous people' and 'photographers' frequently. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of non-idiomatic expressions limit the score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's flow. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('people wants', 'photographers are follow'), incorrect verb forms ('they can published'), and awkward phrasing ('due to this they become image conscious'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction often feels clunky. While the errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and suggest a lack of control over more complex grammatical structures.
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