Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some people believe that artificial intelligence will eventually replace teachers in schools and universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
automation, AI, Educators, tutors, proffesor , educational instiution, academic instituion, learning inst
It is argued that AI will take place of tutors in educational institutions. Although automation help learners to study and research on their own pace; however, I believe that educators can not be replaced by artificial intelligence since they guide the students with emotional well-being, interpersonal skills, and critical thinking, which artificial intelligence eventually can not replace.
On the one hand, artificial intelligence can take place of teachers in repitative, informative, and understanding the concepts using methods like audio-visual. Since the trend of digitalization is booming at an alarming rate, it has become easier for learners to access the knowledge globally regarding the different concepts using AI
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 141 words against the 250-word requirement. Furthermore, the content is entirely off-topic. The prompt asks for a discussion on the ethics of photographing famous people, but the essay discusses whether artificial intelligence will replace teachers. Because the response fails to address the prompt and does not meet the minimum length requirement, it cannot be awarded a passing score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Despite the off-topic content, the essay shows some basic organizational structure. There is an introduction with a clear thesis statement and a paragraph beginning with 'On the one hand'. However, the transition 'Although automation help learners...; however, I believe' is grammatically redundant and awkward. Paragraphing is present, but the lack of development and the failure to address the actual prompt limit the ability to demonstrate higher-level cohesive skills.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic discussed, including terms like 'digitalization', 'interpersonal skills', and 'educational institutions'. However, there are spelling errors such as 'proffesor' and 'instiution'. The range is limited, and the vocabulary is not relevant to the actual task prompt regarding celebrity photography. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of common professional terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'automation help' should be 'automation helps' (subject-verb agreement), and 'take place of' should be 'take the place of'. The sentence structure is somewhat repetitive, relying on basic complex sentences. While there is an attempt at using complex structures, the frequent minor errors and the lack of variety in sentence construction prevent a higher score.
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