Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent times, most of the famous influencers captured their selves by professional photographers anywhere they go. Few individuals think this is good for those people who follow and have interest in famous their lifestyles. While, others argue that this trend is wrong they only focused on famous people. In this essay I will discuss both the views and provide my opinion.

On the one hand, Professional photographers captured photos of well-known people like, actors, Influncers, etc. These photographers known as a Paparazzi. Some famous people give them a salary to capture what they are doing and where they are visiting because famous people wants to be on everyone eyes that is why Paparazzi shoot capture few moments of their life. Local people follow those Influncers and get inspire from them. For example, If any famous Individual wearing branded cloths, local people have faith in them and buy simillar kind of cloths.

On the other hand, Few Individuals think that this wrong photographers follow only famous peoples. They focused only Influencers and actors. Phtographers should have to shoot local news, any political debete, any International news rather than only focusing on Influencers. For example, If in any city has red warning for rain and few city's underpass is flooded, through photographers they can notify local public try to avoid this road. This can be beneficial for local people and famous Individuals. If photographers focused only on them than some major events can be harm both of them.

In my opinion, To follow famous Individuals and captured thier life styles is good but photographers should be capture local news, controversial debete rather than capturing actors. Those who are being paid by actors they are shooting lifestyles of Influncers but they are so many local news channels can hire professional photographers or videographers to capture trending news.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that photographers should focus on local news, the explanation is a bit repetitive and lacks depth. To improve, ensure that your arguments are fully extended with more specific reasoning or examples. For instance, when discussing the benefits of paparazzi, you could elaborate more on the economic impact of the celebrity industry rather than just focusing on fashion trends. The position is consistent, but the overall depth of analysis needs to be more sophisticated to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as in the phrase 'they only focused on famous people' where the subject 'they' is ambiguous. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your pronouns clearly refer back to the intended nouns to create a smoother, more natural progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'influencers', 'paparazzi', and 'controversial'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'captured their selves' instead of 'capture themselves', and 'famous their lifestyles' which is grammatically awkward. Additionally, there are frequent spelling errors like 'Influncers', 'simillar', 'debete', and 'thier'. To move to a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring accurate spelling, as these errors occasionally distract the reader from your message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('famous people wants', 'photographers should have to shoot'), incorrect verb forms ('If any famous Individual wearing branded cloths'), and missing articles. These errors are noticeable and occur frequently. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for these common slips would significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

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