Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This day, prominent people are photographed by professional photographers anywhere they go will ne explained in their different perspectives.. i partly believe that , it is a good thing , since they have their own photographer snapping or covering all their activities where ever they attend any function.

To begin with, for a famous individual to have a photographer covering what ever he or she does in every occasion they go is an interesting if it is not abused or interrupt some important activities. For instance, getting it to to be in a church program where people of God are praying may look awkward and disgusting, because it would distract people in church praying . House of God is meant to be a calm and silent place for individuals to interact with him and focus on to him for their petitions.. If is interesting , if it is managed well.

Again, they use it to create content, because it is a source of income to them. It could be annoying when it is being used wrongly. it also what make them unique and prominent. it is where they find their joy and it proves to them that they like what they are doing. .

In contrast, showcasing themselves like that may become harmful too if absolute care is not taken, because of insecurity. Manynpro

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument, the discussion is underdeveloped and fragmented. The essay ends abruptly mid-sentence ('Manynpro'), meaning the conclusion and the second viewpoint are not fully explored. To improve, ensure you provide a balanced discussion with clear, extended arguments for both perspectives and a definitive personal opinion. The current lack of completion prevents a higher score, as the task is not fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While you use some transition markers like 'To begin with' and 'In contrast', the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Ideas are often repetitive, such as the discussion on the church, which lacks a clear link to the broader topic of celebrity privacy. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the abrupt ending disrupts the overall flow of the text. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that supports your central argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrasing such as 'good thing' and 'interesting', which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'snapping or covering all their activities' and 'disgusting', which is not the most appropriate term for the context of distraction. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise, academic vocabulary related to media, privacy, and public interest, and focus on using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('it also what make them'), punctuation, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which hinders readability. For example, 'This day, prominent people are photographed by professional photographers anywhere they go will ne explained' is syntactically confused. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures. Ensure you proofread for basic errors like missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and spelling mistakes to improve clarity.

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