Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The reputed personalities generally got surrounded by experienced media person to click their images Some humans are in favour as they think them as their role model so they should copy every small think while few population oppose the behaviour of cameramen. In my opinion this approach is very wrong.

Everyone have their personal as well as family time where they want nobody else to be around so that they enjoy freely without any fear of what people think if they see them but shutterbugs does not allow them to do that which seem quite difficult the get out for their home. It seems so irrupting that some times the internal pressure cooker blast on snapper feel them bad. For example if a famous personality was sitting in a hotel and eating something and if very that time someone say can you make such a pose then think about how they person feel during that particular movement. Everybody has to live in society freely due to this nature of supporters clicked the photos change the mindset of the person which bring downfall not only his profession but also in his thinking as he felt so superior than others.

However, journalist help the followers to know more about the person they like. They help the people to know each and every aspects of such dignities. This helps to generate the road map for common person to achieve goal just like their role model.

At the end, the shooter should inform and politely request the personality to give them some time from their busy schedule so that their fans can know more about them. They should not run behind them every time like a cat is chasing a mouse.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed both sides of the argument and provided a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the public's interest in celebrities, the explanation of why this is a 'good thing' is quite brief compared to the arguments against it. The example provided about a celebrity in a hotel is somewhat confusing and does not clearly illustrate the point about the 'downfall' of a person's profession. To improve, ensure that each paragraph contains a well-developed main idea supported by clear, logical examples that directly relate to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'At the end' is not a standard way to introduce a conclusion, and the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the 'pressure cooker' metaphor and the celebrity's experience is difficult to follow. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations. Phrases like 'reputed personalities', 'irrupting', and 'snapper' are either misused or inappropriate for an academic essay. You also rely on some repetitive phrasing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct context. For example, instead of 'snapper', use 'paparazzi' or 'photographers', and replace 'irrupting' with 'intrusive' or 'disruptive'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Everyone have', 'shutterbugs does not'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary punctuation, which makes them difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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