Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
People have different opinions about famous people are photographed by professional photographer. Some say its it goods as these are looked upon by other people while others says, photographer should not be taking pictures of celebrities. We will discuss both view in details. In my opinion they should not be taking picture against their will just to create content.
People who says its a good idea as many people follow these famous people and inspired by their lives which benefit the celebrity as they can motivate people as they are looked upon by others. Also, they can create different trends in clothing and other fashion accessories. Secondly then can benefit brands if they advertise their brands people will buy them. They act as brand ambessador which helps them to earn and brands get the publicity.
Despite those positive outcomes, there are certain negative aspects to it so some people believe its outrages. Famous people regular life is hampered by these paparazzi, they are reluctant to go to public places on regular hours as their every moved is photographed and posted online. Many a times this is against their will so their life is not private and it becomes suffocation sometimes to have these kind of life. Although they have lavish lifestyle, but these situation place their life in danger at times. For instant, a young famous girl was photographed and it was posted online and many people spread hatered about her rather than positive comments, which indeed reduce her confidence to great level.
To summarize It may not always be positive outcome of this. people can give positive remarks or may have bad comments about them. Photographers should not take pictures of famous people without their consent, its definitely not a good idea.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding celebrities as 'brand ambassadors' is relevant but lacks depth. The example provided about the 'young famous girl' is a bit vague and could have been more effectively linked to the broader discussion on privacy. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more specific reasoning or illustrative examples that directly support the main argument. The position is consistent throughout the essay, which is a positive aspect of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic progression of ideas, moving from the benefits of photography to the negative impacts and finally the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'Secondly', 'Also', 'To summarize'). Additionally, some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the link between 'these' and the preceding ideas could be smoother. Improving the variety and sophistication of linking words would enhance the overall flow of the essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'its it goods', 'outrages' (instead of 'outrageous'), and 'suffocation' (used as a noun where an adjective like 'suffocating' would be more appropriate). Spelling errors like 'ambessador' and 'hatered' also detract from the quality of the writing. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people who says'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'photographer should not be taking'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and apostrophes. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and basic sentence structure would be highly beneficial.
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