Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In today's world, fame is the most important thing people are seeking for. Few individuals believe following high profile people and photographing their every moment is a good thing while other argues that. Likewise, every coin has two sides, I will be discussing both the positive and negative sides along with my personal opinion.

The primary advantage of getting photographed by professional photographers is they capture pictures which can be posted on social platforms such as Instagram, Facebook or Twitter and generate some income for both photographer as well as the model. Also, some people call them as an influencer or free lancers who influence people with their creative photography. Additionally, few photo of those famous people as sold in billions in international market such as Charlie Chaplin's portrait.

Unfortunately, as every advantages comes with drawbacks such as this one their life won't be any private. Even if they want to keep privacy then too they won't be able to do it due to their fame and followers. For instance, an famous person try sneeze also, it becomes a global news due to it's fame and popularity which he earns from being photographed.

In my personal opinion, I would like to keep life private instead of sharing everything to whole world. Moreover, we can enjoy and do whatever we want to, don't need to think twice before doing anything as we are not under surveillances by anyone.

In conclusion, it can be said that keeping life private for famous people is hard but they are used to it and earning from it. Also, photographer should keep their life private whenever it's asked for instead of exploiting them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding income generation is mentioned but not fully explained, and the example of Charlie Chaplin is slightly disconnected from the modern context of social media influencers. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the points made. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more detailed explanations and concrete, relevant examples that directly support your arguments rather than listing them briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices like 'Additionally', 'Unfortunately', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'as every advantages comes with drawbacks such as this one'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow and logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'influencer', 'surveillances', and 'exploiting'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'fame is the most important thing people are seeking for' (should be 'seeking') and 'an famous person try sneeze' (grammatically incorrect and unnatural). To improve, focus on learning common collocations and refining your use of academic vocabulary to ensure it sounds more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('other argues', 'every advantages comes') and incorrect article usage ('an famous person'). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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