Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Recently, it has been observer that most skilled photographers prefer to capture photographs of popular people. Many individuals believe that it is the right way to learn about their lives to the local public. However, others refuge that notion. I believe that getting photos is the best option for humans to learn positive and good lesson from renowned people. I will discuss both these views with relevant examples and reasons.

On the one hand, according to people who support the former view is that this action would be assist them to inspire in their real life. Because most humans want to read famous person's lives story in order to motive themselves. For example, teachers often try to teach good lesson to their students from magazines and photographs to recognize them, this policy would be not only help to learn about their lives but it also support them to apply good lesson in the real life.

On the other hand, others argue that this action would be unsafe for the families of popular person. Because, individuals often try to use their real lives information in order to increase followers and money. For instance, most social media operators try to click the pictures with the help of professional photographers and utilize them to build reputation among others operators. Thus, this could be a stressful for the members of celebrities, because they often need to face audience when they try to go outside.

In conclusion, photographs can help humans to learn essential lesson to get success in life, but this might revels personal information of renowned people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding the 'positive lessons' from celebrities is a bit vague and lacks a concrete, real-world example of how a specific celebrity's life story provides a lesson. The second paragraph regarding the safety of families is more relevant but could be expanded with more depth. The conclusion is brief and summarizes the main points, but the overall development of the arguments remains at a basic level, preventing a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the two body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'On the one hand, according to people who support the former view is that...' which contains a grammatical error that disrupts the flow. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall coherence of the arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'others refuge that notion' (should be 'refute') and 'social media operators' (likely meaning 'influencers' or 'paparazzi'). The repetition of words like 'learn' and 'lives' limits the lexical variety. While the meaning is clear throughout, the lack of sophisticated or idiomatic language keeps the score in the mid-range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'it has been observer' (observed), 'this action would be assist them' (would assist), and 'this could be a stressful' (could be stressful). Subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency are areas that need significant improvement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band score.

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