Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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In this day and age, it is widely seen that prominent personalities are all over the world. So, photographers like to capture pictures of renowned personalities that this is a great as people are exceted for their lives while many deduce that it should not done. This essay will discuss both view points before my own prospective.

On the one hand, it is profound to see celebrities's lifestyle as numerous pupil see them as their rolemodels and follow them in daily lives. As been captured by specialised cameramen Actors got money, gifts from them. It not only gives them name and fame but also earns money. In the recent study of Hindustan Times, the great Indian Actor Salmon khon earns 2.7 billion $ from these media. So, Being photographed is beneficial for them.

On the contrary, A number of individuals deam that this norms are not good. because Actors have their own life, when photographers follow them they feel uncomfortable and not able to keep their personal life private. Moreover, sometimes it impacts

the audience as well because from actors youngstar start comparing themselves and they not able to understand the differentiation of reel with real life. To epitomise that recently Ranbeer's picture shows that he is indulging in some stunts but one boy without any supervision tries to copy that and results in death. All these things effects the normal people lives as wells.

To conclude that after discussing both views, my viewpoint that it is good to follow enormous personalities and take picture but it should be done in a good manner without harming their personal beliefs and in appropriate manner.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The first body paragraph attempts to explain the benefits of being photographed but relies on somewhat illogical reasoning, such as claiming actors receive gifts directly from photographers. The second paragraph introduces the negative impact on privacy and the influence on youth, but the example provided is anecdotal and lacks clarity. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are often under-developed or based on questionable premises, which limits the depth of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear introduction and conclusion. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the contrary', the transitions within paragraphs are sometimes abrupt or confusing. For example, the jump from discussing financial benefits to the example of an actor is not smoothly linked. Additionally, the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the argument at times.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'prominent personalities are all over the world' (which is vague) and 'numerous pupil' (incorrect usage of 'pupil' instead of 'people' or 'fans'). Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'deam' (deem) and 'enormous' (when 'famous' or 'celebrated' was intended). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'exceted', 'Salmon khon', 'Ranbeer') prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Actors got money', 'All these things effects'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'it should not done'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences being run-on or missing necessary commas. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing.

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