Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In modern era, the trend about clicking pictures of renowned celebrities is increasing day by day whether they like to click photos or not. Therefore, some inhabitants believe in their expensive lifestyle and more curious to follow them while, others think this is not secure for their personal life. As per me, this is a negative development for their privacy and safety purposes and i will discuss both the views related with this statement in henceforth.

On the one hand, Why public interested to follow their famous celebrity? First and the foremost reason is that inhabitants want to follow the lifestyle of their favourite role models heroes or heroines such as their diet plan, clothing choice and so on. Even popular celebrity advertise various products and individual are interested in buying those products. Second reason is that media click pictures so this is a source of earning money for them. There are numerous social media platforms and newspaper photographer used to upload those pictures and earn money.

On the flip side, why this is a negative development? Many photographers click pictures of famous celebrities which is not secure for their privacy and safety. To explain it more, they have to suffer from many fake rumours. Due to this they are suffer from stress and depression. Even they have to come with their bodyguards and do not go anywhere without protection. In addition, their personal and professional life have no difference. They also want to spend time with their families. Unwanted photographs create false stories and rumours about their life which is unsafe for them. For instance, Sushant Rajput who was a great actor in India and committed suicide because he was suffer form stress and many fake news about him and nobody knows their real cause of stress because of false rumours So, famous celebrities also have many enemies.

To conclude, although public have lots of interest in their favourite celebrities to click pictures but they should respect their privacy. Media should allowed to click pictures on events and should not click pictures without permission. According to me their should be a balance in their personal and professional life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the public's interest in celebrity lifestyles and the negative impact on privacy. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat uneven. The explanation regarding the media's financial motivation is clear, but the example of the Indian actor is slightly tangential and could have been more tightly linked to the argument about privacy. The position is consistent throughout, but the depth of analysis could be improved to reach a higher band by exploring the societal implications more thoroughly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a progression of ideas, moving from the public's interest to the negative consequences. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Second reason is' and 'In addition'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some transitions between sentences feel abrupt. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow between ideas could be smoother to achieve a more natural, cohesive feel.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'renowned', 'inhabitants', and 'professional', but there are also instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'clicking pictures' instead of 'taking photographs' and 'inhabitants' used to refer to the general public. While communication is not impeded, the range is somewhat limited, and the errors in word choice prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('media click', 'they are suffer'), article usage, and sentence fragments ('So, famous celebrities also have many enemies'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation structures indicate a lack of control. To improve, the student should focus on ensuring consistent verb tenses and correcting common errors in sentence construction.

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