Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this era of globalization, famous celebrities are often shown on social media by photographers. It is considered by some people that it is best to do so as public is interested in their lives. However, others believe that it is bad to take famous people's photos. This writing will explicate both of the view along with my own perspective in conclusion.
To commence with former notion, there are lots of benefits to this statement. The predominant one, by watching famous people on social media, public get to learn about their daily routines. To elaborate it, folks get attracted to the schedule of celebrities and learn things from their lives. For instance, things which makes them famous like daily activities, at what time they do it and how they do it etc. Therefore, public eyes on famous folks can help public learn something helpful which they can adapt in their daily life to attain a lifestyle like celebrities.
Moving towards latter statement, the prominent drawback of taking photographs of famous people is that it can compromise their privacy. To explain it, being viewed by whole world on big screen can sometimes show things which famous people do not want to show. To epitome, personal phone number, indoors pictures of house and many more can be showed by media. Also, this can be harmful for those celebrities who have threats of getting killed and can be blackmailed from those photographs as well. Hence, this can lead to loss of personal space of famous one's and can posse a risk to their life and their loved ones.
To conclude, although some say that it is normal to share famous people life yet I believe that it should be limited to as per person's choice who is being showed in pictures.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For example, the argument regarding the benefits of celebrity routines is quite superficial, focusing on 'daily activities' without exploring the broader cultural impact. The second body paragraph touches on privacy concerns but relies on somewhat generic examples. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced analysis and specific, real-world examples rather than general statements about 'folks' or 'big screens'. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments need more sophisticated elaboration to fully satisfy the requirements of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Moving towards', and 'To conclude' to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is occasionally mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'To epitome' (which is incorrect usage) and 'To elaborate it'. The flow between sentences is generally clear, but the referencing is sometimes repetitive, with frequent use of 'famous people' and 'public'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is more precise would enhance the overall cohesion of the essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'lots of benefits', 'bad to take', and 'things which makes them famous'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'explicate both of the view' (should be 'views') and 'posse a risk' (should be 'pose'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of minor errors in word choice limit the score. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to media and privacy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'public get to learn' (missing article 'the') and 'share famous people life' (missing possessive 'people's'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on mastering the use of articles, possessives, and ensuring that complex sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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