Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent decades, celebritie's lives are being inspected everywhere they go. Although some individuals believe that this should be done, others suspect that they have the right to a private life. I personally think that it is important to respect their privacy.

The society has become interested in the lives of popular people. They somehow worship these communities and want to know every detail of them such as the clothes they wear, the places they go and so on. As a result, it has become essential to inspect the celebrities doing. Individuals interested in celebrities suppose that famous people are not harmed by doing so. Besides, celebrities can have their private lives behind closed doors.

However, some think that it is not a good thing to photograph them when they have not consented. To clarify, nobody likes to know that there are eyes watching them. As a matter of fact, this is the reason that they usually come outside wearing sunglasses and a cap to. avoid inspecting eyes. I personally believe that they are individuals with the right to live however they wish. For instance, it is always difficult for popular people to. hide who they are dating. There are usually spread rumours about who their partner is at the moment. In addition, they avoid answering these questions when they are interviewed. It is a sign that they do think that some things should be kept hidden.

In conclusion, celebrities have the right to keep. their lives private. Nevertheless, not only do some people believe that they must be inspected, but also they must be truthful to the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding the public's interest is stated but not deeply explored, and the explanation of why celebrities hide their faces is a bit repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of the implications of paparazzi culture. While the position is clear throughout, the conclusion introduces a new point about celebrities being 'truthful to the world' which is not fully integrated into the previous arguments, making the final summary feel slightly disconnected.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion' effectively. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly mechanical or the referencing is unclear. For example, the phrase 'inspect the celebrities doing' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow of the second paragraph. Additionally, the transition between the idea of public interest and the counter-argument about privacy could be smoother. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate, and the central ideas are easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'consented', 'rumours', and 'privacy'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'inspecting eyes' instead of 'prying eyes' or 'scrutiny', and 'worship these communities' which is not the correct term for fans or the public. Some errors, like 'celebritie's' (incorrect possessive) and 'inspecting the celebrities doing', slightly hinder the precision of your expression. To improve, focus on learning collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar that occasionally impede clarity. For example, there are several instances of sentence fragments or misplaced periods, such as '...cap to. avoid' and '...keep. their'. Additionally, there are errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'The society has become' (should be 'Society has become') and 'celebritie's lives' (should be 'celebrities' lives'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main point, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.

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