Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People often argue that it is good thing if the celebrities are photographed by professional media wherever they go, while others contradict it. This essay will discuss both the perspective and why I believe that it is not best approach that media follows famous person wherever they go.

On one hand the supporters argue that If media click the photographs of celebrity, it helps them in in raising their followers, which further helps to grow their career. For example, pictures of actors, singers and sports stars attending events or travelling can be widely shared in newspapers and on social media. Secondly, photographers and media organizations provide information that many people actively want to see.

On other hand that who supports the idea that Clicking celebrities are unfair, even they are public figure, but this does not mean that they have given up their right to privacy. Taking photographs of them while they are spending time with family, eating in a restaurant or simply walking in public can make them feel uncomfortable. To illustrate , they are many famous actresses who went in trauma and depression as media leaked their unprofessional pictures. I believe Same even famous people have public life but no one has right to breach privacy.

In conclusion, media photographed the famous people can satisfy public interest and provide entertainment, but it impact their privacy and personal lives. I believe fame should not mean that a person loses the basic right to a private life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the essay falls slightly short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which necessitates a penalty. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat under-developed. For instance, the point about celebrities' careers growing due to media attention is mentioned but not fully explored with depth. Similarly, the argument regarding privacy is clear but could benefit from more nuanced examples beyond general mentions of 'trauma and depression'. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation and a concrete, well-integrated example to fully support the main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On one hand', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', which help the reader follow the argument. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'On other hand that who supports the idea that Clicking celebrities are unfair'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more naturally connected rather than relying on repetitive structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'click the photographs' (instead of 'take photographs') and 'media leaked their unprofessional pictures'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms like 'good thing' and 'famous people'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'paparazzi', 'public scrutiny', 'invasion of privacy', or 'professional conduct'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'it is good thing if the celebrities are photographed' (missing article) and 'they are many famous actresses' (incorrect pronoun usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and proofreading for minor slips would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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