Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the digital era, every person has a different way of collecting memories. Professional photographers always follow celebrities to take pictures to show their fans because they want to see them in their daily lives. Some people think this is the best way to collect information about them, but others say that following popular personalities is not good for them. I will discuss both views in this essay and share my point of view. I agree with the second opinion, as every person has a personal life and has the right to enjoy it.

To begin with, it is the profession of photographers to take pictures of them to publish in the news and articles. With this, they have set up their own business to gain popularity and profit. If they serve the public, they show curiosity about the lives of famous people. So, they demand more to see them, and photographers earn name and fame in their profession, as well as celebrities also attain the attention of the public. For example, the public watches the movies and serials because they know the actors and actresses from the start. All of this is possible because of magazines and articles that are published by photographers.

On the other hand, some people argue about it. This is the wrong way to always follow them to click photos. The main reason is that they have a private life. In simple words, celebrities are also normal human beings, so they have their own family and friend circle. Every person has the right to enjoy life according to his/her wish. For example, when politicians hold rallies for their party promotions, the media always follow them to collect news and articles. They deliver wrong information to the public to avoid the actual personality of them.

To conclude, although it is normal to take pictures of famous people because of their popularity and public sho

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses both viewpoints and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that photographers seek profit and the public shows curiosity, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The example regarding politicians is slightly off-topic, as it shifts the focus away from 'famous people' (celebrities) to political figures, which weakens the argument. To improve, ensure that your supporting points directly relate to the prompt and provide more detailed explanations for your claims. The conclusion is incomplete, which prevents a full summary of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but some transitions between ideas within paragraphs feel abrupt. The abrupt ending of the essay significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final thought is left unfinished. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring all paragraphs are fully developed will help improve this score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'digital era', 'popular personalities', and 'curiosity'. However, the vocabulary is often repetitive and lacks the precision required for higher bands. For instance, phrases like 'earn name and fame' and 'wrong way' are somewhat simplistic. There are also instances of awkward collocations, such as 'avoid the actual personality of them'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary and idiomatic expressions that are appropriate for a formal essay, and ensure that your word choices are precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'celebrities also attain the attention' (should be 'celebrities also gain the attention') and 'some people argue about it' (which lacks a clear object). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is sometimes repetitive. There are also minor errors in article usage and prepositional phrases. To improve, focus on mastering complex sentence structures and proofreading for common grammatical slips to ensure that your writing is more accurate and fluent.

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