Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In contemporary world, lifestyle of celebrities is displayed on social media on instant basis because of constant updates from paparazzi's. Few people supports celebrities privacy and blame photographers for instant updates, whereas other's are in favour of paparazzi's as they get regular updates about their favourite personality. This essay will elaborate both points before I provide my supporting stand on Celeb's privacy.

On one hand, public wants detailed information about their favourite star. Thereby, they're going to consume content which depicts their routine, dietary plans, which clothing brand they wear etc. Hence, they support pap's culture by following them on social media and always writes in favour of them. Some entertainers also do paid media promotion via paparazzi's post.

On the other side of the argument, people who respects an individual personal space are completely against it. They criticize influencers who posts content on celebrity lifestyle. According to them, privacy is every human right and it should be treated respectfully by all. There has been cases where we've seen paparazzi's crossing boundaries and follow celeb's to their house. Also, they click malfunctioning images of female stars & post it on Instagram. Mostly everyone has seen such constant and that's why they have started the moment to stop photographers invading.

Lastly, I opine pictures/videos taken respecting other person boundaries and choice makes the difference. Instead of posting lust traps content a social media manager should focus on family friendly content which can be observed by people of all age groups.

In Summary, we currently live in a social media period and it's undeniable that it's going to grow rapidly. However, government or social media companies should put some restrictions on content so it shouldn't be consumed by children's. To be a paparazzi you need to have license just like a media person then only quality people will come in industry.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding the public's interest in celebrities is supported by general statements about 'dietary plans' and 'clothing brands' without providing a concrete example or deeper analysis. The conclusion introduces new ideas, such as government regulation and licensing for paparazzi, which were not previously discussed in the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, you should focus on extending your main points with more specific examples and ensuring that your conclusion summarizes the arguments already presented rather than introducing new ones.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On one hand,' 'On the other side,' and 'In Summary' to guide the reader. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as the use of 'Thereby' at the start of a sentence or the awkward phrasing 'Mostly everyone has seen such constant'. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun 'it' in the final paragraph, which lacks a specific antecedent. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'contemporary world,' 'paparazzi,' and 'influencers.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'malfunctioning images' (likely meaning 'unflattering' or 'compromising'), 'lust traps content' (likely meaning 'clickbait' or 'sensationalist'), and 'started the moment' (likely meaning 'movement'). These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on learning the specific contexts in which words are used and avoid translating directly from your native language if the resulting English phrase is non-standard.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('Few people supports,' 'people who respects,' 'influencers who posts') and pluralization ('children's' instead of 'children'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary apostrophes used in plurals (e.g., 'paparazzi's,' 'celeb's'). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your main points. Increasing your focus on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading for common errors will significantly improve your score.

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