Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, the trend of following famous celebrities everywhere, where they go by camera people or media staff has been very common. While, some assert this it is a good for their fans who have interest in their lives, other think that it is not a good thing. Thia essaywill explain both views before sharing my view.

On the one hand, the supported of this trend assert that by following their favourate star on regular basis they will get motivated and work hard to acheive their goals as a same way their favour celebrete did that. Therefore, more and more media staff always keep an eye on famous stars to capture their daily routain to gain more TRP's.

On the other hand, the critics of this nation believe that this thing have negative influence on the personal life of famous people such as they can not enjoy private time and holidays with their loved once because they are always sorounder with camers. Consequently, the line of personal and professional life is get diappered from their life just because of the photographers who always follow them. In addition, get followed by photographers is not safe for them, where they always in the front of camera screen, everyone know that is current location of celab and what he or she is doing. As a result, their hater can miss use this information.

In my view, while it is true that fans always want to see their favouite star life style and daily activites to get insperation from them, the negative effect of this trend such as safe compromise and not personal life of star will pull me in the agains this notion.

In conclusion, people love to follow famous people on different channels, but the forget their personal life in also matter for them. photographer follow famous stars to just get more views.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding fans being 'motivated' by celebrities is a bit tenuous and lacks specific examples. The discussion on the negative impacts is more developed, touching on privacy and safety, but the overall depth of analysis is restricted by the brevity of the paragraphs. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the points discussed. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your reasoning with more concrete examples or logical explanations for each perspective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'the critics of this nation' (likely meaning 'notion') and 'the line of personal and professional life is get diappered'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. While the overall progression is logical, the lack of sophisticated linking words and some awkward phrasing impacts the cohesion of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'favourate', 'routain', 'sorounder', 'camers', and 'diappered'. The phrase 'critics of this nation' is a misuse of vocabulary, and 'safe compromise' is an awkward collocation. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'professional photographers' and 'personal life', the range is limited, and the persistent spelling errors suggest a lack of control over more complex lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'some assert this it is a good', 'this thing have negative influence', and 'everyone know that is current location'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. While the meaning is generally conveyed, these persistent errors require the reader to make an effort to understand the intended message. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, verb tense consistency, and proofreading to eliminate minor slips in grammar and punctuation.

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