Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this contemporary era, celeberities are taking pictures by a professionals photographers rather then taking pictures by their selfes while on the other side some of the individuals are thinking that this is not a good way to follow up famous humans by the photographers.In my view I think making memories with the photographers are not good way but i can explain both the views with my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with. the first point is gaining views and likes on the posts, because the popular individuals posting the picture on social media because this is the job they are doing so they need to gets comments and views on the post if the picture or videos are made in professinal way and natural style. For example ,in these days most people posted their pictures on instagrams and facebook and many more apps and they make a content by professional style to make money.
On the other hand, few of them have concern that following famous people is not a correct path for picture takers because they are totally depend on them and they did not focus on the others works like wedding contract parties contracts which make lots of money for them. For instance, if they are signing the agreement with them then they can not do the work with other people.
In my view, the first point is they can interfair in their personal life, if the influencer they go on popular places to spent their time with their near and dear but if they are taking photographers then they are always with you and they spoil their personal life that is not good for influencer and some time they can say about their personal life.
To conclude, although these statements are playing different role on their ways but depending and sharing everything with photographers is not suitable because they can share your personal life with other people and make them laugh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, though the development is somewhat superficial. The arguments regarding why photographers follow celebrities (e.g., social media engagement) and the counter-arguments (e.g., privacy concerns and professional focus) are relevant but lack depth. The position is clear, but the explanation in the third paragraph is slightly repetitive and confusingly phrased. To improve, you should focus on expanding your ideas with more specific, logical examples rather than listing general observations. The conclusion summarizes the main points but does not fully synthesize the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'To begin with. the first point is...' uses incorrect punctuation and lacks a smooth connection to the previous paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or misused, such as 'In my view' appearing multiple times in a way that feels forced. The progression of ideas is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument's development from one point to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'celeberities', 'selfes', 'professinal', and 'interfair'. Word choice is often imprecise or non-idiomatic, such as 'famous humans' instead of 'celebrities' or 'public figures', and 'picture takers' instead of 'paparazzi' or 'photographers'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the high frequency of errors in basic vocabulary prevent the essay from reaching a higher band score. You need to focus on learning correct collocations and standard spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'celebrities are taking pictures by a professionals photographers'), incorrect preposition use, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'they are totally depend on them'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing or misplaced commas and periods. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely prevent communication. Increasing your control over basic sentence patterns is essential.
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