Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A section of society considers it a positive development if media capture them in their cameras to make them approachable to the audience. However, others consider that doing photgraphy of famous people can interfere their personal lives. I firmly contend that well-known people should be captured in photographs but there ought to be certain boundaries. So that they can also relish their lives like ordinary people.
To begin with, one of the prominent reasons why celebrities should be photographed is that people can know about their life-style, dressing sense, and daily routine activities. Since people might be highly interested in knowing about the lives of such personalities, they can take some appreciation in their lives that how they struggled to reach at this stage. To exemplify, when I came across Dljit Dusanjh's life and his philanthropicity through social media, I was greatly inspired to provide help others.
Nevertheless, some people, including me, believe that famous people should also have a privacy to do anything in their lives, such dinning out with family or friends and going on vacations. Since
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 179 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you have addressed both views and provided a clear personal opinion, the discussion is incomplete. The final paragraph is cut off mid-sentence, preventing a full exploration of the arguments. To improve, you must ensure you provide a complete, balanced discussion with fully extended supporting points for each perspective. The current length prevents you from reaching a higher band, as the task is not fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the progression of the essay is interrupted by the abrupt ending. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is incomplete, which disrupts the logical flow of the argument. To achieve a higher score, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that you use a wider range of cohesive devices to connect sentences and paragraphs more fluidly. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of a conclusion due to the unfinished state of the text hinders the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'approachable', 'prominent', and 'philanthropicity'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'doing photgraphy' (taking photographs) and 'interfere their personal lives' (interfere with). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'photgraphy' and 'dinning'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you proofread for spelling. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic or topic-specific phrases would also help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'capture them in their cameras' (capture them on camera), 'interfere their personal lives', and 'have a privacy'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure is sometimes awkward. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your writing. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Practicing more complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also be beneficial.
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