Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A section of society considers it a positive development if media captures them in their cameras to make them approachable to the audience. However, others consider that doing photography of famous people can interfere their personal lives. I firmly contend that well-known people should be captured in photographs but there ought to be certain boundaries. This is to ensure that they also relish their lives like ordinary people.

To begin with, one of the prominent reasons why celebrities should be photographed is that people can know about their life-style, dressing sense, and achievements. Since people might be highly interested in knowing about the lives of such personalities, they can take an appreciation in their lives regarding how they struggled to reach at this stage. To exemplify, when I came across one of famous pollywood singer, Diljit Dusanjh, and his philanthropy through social media, I was greatly inspired to learn something from him.

Nevertheless, some people, including me, believe that famous people should also have a privacy to do anything in their lives, such dinning out with family or friends and going on vacations. Since they are photographed by professionals, it can become quite stressful for them to show their personal lives. For example, there was a hollywood actor named as Sushant Sharma, he committed suicide a couple of years back because his personal lives' problems were revealed on social media. Thus, it can create an unhealthy culture in which they get scared about capturing their private moments.

To conclude, although people can gat motivation from renowned people, I firmly opine that there ought to be some limits on photographers, which will ultimately be benefcial for the well-being of famous people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting both sides of the argument and a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the benefits of inspiration and the drawbacks regarding privacy. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The example of the actor is a bit underdeveloped and lacks a direct, logical link to the broader argument about professional photography versus personal privacy. While the position is clear throughout, the essay would benefit from more nuanced exploration of the 'boundaries' mentioned in the introduction to fully reach the higher band descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two viewpoints. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Nevertheless', and 'To conclude' are used effectively to guide the reader. However, there are some minor issues with referencing and flow; for instance, the transition between the general argument and the specific example in the second paragraph could be smoother. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task. You use some good collocations like 'prominent reasons', 'unhealthy culture', and 'well-being'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as 'doing photography of famous people' (should be 'photographing famous people') and 'have a privacy' (should be 'have privacy'). Additionally, there are minor spelling or word-form errors like 'dinning' (dining) and 'gat' (get). These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the essay from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There is a good attempt at complex sentences, such as 'Since people might be highly interested... they can take an appreciation'. However, there are several grammatical errors, including 'interfere their personal lives' (needs 'with'), 'reach at this stage' (should be 'reach this stage'), and 'personal lives' problems' (awkward possessive). While these errors are frequent, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of your main points. To improve, focus on preposition usage and correct verb-object collocations.

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