Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, famous people have been photographed almost everywhere they go. While some individuals believe this is acceptable because of public interest and intensive growth, I believe that this disturb their privacy.

On the one hand, celebrities are role model for their fans, attracting them to know more about their lifestyle, daily routines and fashion interests, by which they may gain inspiration and implement their dos and don'ts in their personal life. While taking photographers, professional photographs increase their revenue when they upload them on social media platforms, newspapers and magazines. This helps celebrities to gain popularity worldwide. For instance, most famous personalities are getting more effective projects and events due to their attractive photographers. Therefore, the public and media make a person the most popular in the world.

On the other hand, professional photographers should not constantly follow famous people because it invasions their privacy. In other words, although media is as essential part of making anyone more special than others, some celebrities want to keep their personal and professional life separate and do not admire to show it in this public. To exemplify, the tribune newspaper mostly publish personal movements of celebrities, which they spend with their family in order to gain fame and increase sale; this is considered inappropriate and ineffective. As a result, these arrangements gives them unnecessary depression of being highlighted in the public.

In conclusion, even though public interest is precisely decent to follow famous personalities for their personal and professional reasons, I think they give them privacy for enjoying their personal life instead of giving them stress and anxiety to lose their freedom.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the role of celebrities as influencers and the ethical concerns regarding privacy. However, some points are under-developed; for example, the argument about 'revenue' and 'effective projects' is slightly unclear in its connection to the photographers themselves. The conclusion is a bit repetitive in its phrasing. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting point is fully explained with more precise examples rather than general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand,' 'On the other hand,' and 'As a result,' which help the reader follow the argument. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is slightly hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'by which they may gain inspiration and implement their dos and don'ts.' Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal cohesion within sentences could be more sophisticated to improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'intensive growth' and 'inappropriate and ineffective,' though some word choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as 'attractive photographers' (referring to the photos themselves) and 'admire to show it.' There are also minor errors in collocation, such as 'invasions their privacy' instead of 'invades their privacy.' The range is sufficient for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'these arrangements gives them' and 'celebrities are role model' (should be 'role models'). Additionally, there are errors in word form and usage, such as 'although media is as essential part' (should be 'an essential part'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.

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