Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
As we know the photography is the most advanced thing in this advanced world.any one wants to look like gorgeous younger and beautiful.in this fast and scientific world the camera for photo session is the more important thing for human life and world wiled life.
Most famous people or professional like heroes and heroins infect a common people want to photo session by professional photographers.
some people are say that a good thing,because many people could save beautiful moment with there loved once could see this memories for many years.it is a good way for joyful memories.famous people wants also like photo session by professional photographer because it is a part of them professional life.if they do not make the photos they can't be famous.
other people say photographers are wrong to follow famous people they should not do that.because every person have private life which the photographers are want to trying to explore them personal life.
in my oppinion
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 160 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the essay attempts to address both views, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples or depth. The conclusion is entirely missing, as the text cuts off abruptly at 'in my oppinion'. Because the task is not fully addressed and the response is significantly under-length, it falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction, and the paragraphing is non-existent or confusingly placed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'because' and 'also'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The lack of a concluding paragraph further disrupts the logical flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is basic and often misused, such as 'world wiled life' instead of 'wildlife' and 'heroes and heroins' instead of 'celebrities'. There is a lack of variety, and the student relies on simple, repetitive phrasing. Word choice is frequently inaccurate, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to media and privacy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('famous people wants'), article usage, and sentence structure. Punctuation is inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing capital letters at the start of sentences. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. These errors are pervasive and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, indicating a need for a stronger grasp of basic English syntax.
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