Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

it is argued by some individual that famous folks are photographed by professional cameraman's every where when they do any outing. Some people says that it is good thing, because normal people takes interest in the lives of celebrities. While other thinks it wrong to follow them everywhere.

On the one hands, photographers are also a working professional some times they are hired by famous individual to taking picture. Because it will keep the influencers famous. Additionally it their job they are getting paid by the photographed they clicked and they don't have any other profession to earn their bread and butter.

On the other hand, Photographers should not follow the celebrities every where. Because also have their personal life. It also create a sense of threat to their lives and their loved ones. For instance, some time famous individuals travel with their off-springs. If a lot of photograph follow them it will reveals their location and fans will makes group to see them and their children may scare.

In my opinion, Photographer should not follow famous individual everywhere. Because they also have their personal lives and they spend their free time with their loved ones. Although, photographers also have to earn their bread and butter . So they should only follow them award functions , promotion and any events.

To conclude, follow celebrities everywhere is not ethical for the photographers. However, they should only follow them in a event or party functions

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the essay falls short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While the main points are relevant, they are somewhat under-developed. For example, the argument regarding the safety of children is a good point but lacks depth. Additionally, the conclusion is very brief and does not fully summarize the main points. To improve, you should expand on your supporting arguments with more detailed examples and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more comprehensive discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal shifts in perspective. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'Although, photographers also have to earn their bread and butter'. The flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, and the referencing is sometimes unclear. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms, such as 'cameraman's' (should be 'cameramen'), 'off-springs' (should be 'offspring'), and 'photographed' (should be 'photographs'). You rely on some repetitive phrases like 'earn their bread and butter'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'privacy', 'intrusive', 'public interest', or 'ethical boundaries', and ensure you use the correct word forms in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Some people says', 'photographers... is'), incorrect pluralization, and missing articles. For example, 'If a lot of photograph follow them it will reveals' contains multiple errors in agreement and tense. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading your work to correct basic errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement.

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