Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In today's world, it is increasingly common that famous people are photographed by experienced photographers wherever they go. While some proponents believe that it is a good thing as people are keen to learn more about their personal lives, others contend that photographers violates their privacy with constant scrutiny. This essay will outline both perspectives in detail and opine that photographers need to adhere to ethical standards while taking pictures of famous personalities.

One of the primary reasons why people believe that it is beneficial to photograph famous personalities is that they create an emotional connection between fans and their favourite actors. This is largely because youngsters nowadays shape their lifestyles and goals according to the behaviour of their famous personalities. If their favourite actors contribute to perform good deeds, they would be likely to follow in their footsteps. As a result, gaining a glimpse into their favourite models personal lives encourages individuals to become well-responsible citizens, thereby strengthening their emotional connection with their famous people. For example, the well-known Bollywood actress Anushka Sharma, who has a huge fan following because of her religious commitment towards her life . Consequently, her personal lifestyle is frequently covered by the paparazzi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to fully develop your ideas. You have introduced the topic and outlined both perspectives, but the essay is incomplete. You have not provided a counter-argument or a full discussion of the negative view regarding privacy, nor have you concluded your own opinion. Because the task is not fully addressed due to the length, the development of ideas is insufficient. To improve, you must ensure you provide a balanced discussion for both sides and a clear, supported conclusion, while meeting the minimum word count to allow for full exploration of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay shows a logical attempt at structure, with an introduction and a body paragraph. You use cohesive devices such as 'While', 'One of the primary reasons', and 'Consequently' to link ideas. However, because the essay is incomplete, the overall progression is cut short. Paragraphing is present, but the lack of a second body paragraph and a conclusion makes the organization feel unfinished. To reach a higher band, ensure you have a clear paragraph for each viewpoint and a concluding paragraph that summarizes your position, using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proponents', 'scrutiny', and 'ethical standards'. There are some minor collocation issues, such as 'contribute to perform good deeds' (should be 'perform good deeds') and 'well-responsible citizens'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to media, privacy, and celebrity culture will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'If their favourite actors contribute... they would be likely to follow'. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'photographers violates' (subject-verb agreement) and 'religious commitment towards her life' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but these persistent errors in basic grammar prevent the writing from being considered highly accurate. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed without errors. Proofreading for small slips will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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