Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays celebrities preferred to take photographs by competent photographers. Few people state that it is a good practice because they are one of them who interested in their lives. other individual believes that photographers following the celebrities to take their picture.

Some individuals thinks that it is a good practice due to they are following the celebrities lifestyle to keep themselves update as they do. Following their daily work routine and events to become a ''Fan" and dreaming to become same like them. For example, The similar face of celebrity follows his role model "Shah Rukh Khan", because of his following he became a famous in the region and many ad makers offered him for advertisement shoot due to similar performance as original. I agreed that, keeping update of my childhood actors life and I preferred to see their latest photos and their lives.

The few people thinks that photographers are doing wrong, following the famous people to take their pictures. Some celebrities are not interested in the photos, but the photographers follow them to take one picture. For example, the one of the Bollywood actress was going to fitness center. on the way she saw photographers and try to escape but the photographer followed her to take picture. I disagree with the opinion because the photographers is doing his job to take latest picture of celebrity.

In conclusion, popular personalities interested that some professional photographers should take their photo. when people saw their latest photos, some will feel good to see their latest photos and I agreed with these statement because I do love to see my favourite actors videos and photos. The other feels that why photographers back of them to take their pictures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, including both views and a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. The example regarding the 'Shah Rukh Khan' lookalike is slightly tangential to the core issue of paparazzi ethics. The personal opinion is clear, but the supporting arguments lack depth and rely on simplistic reasoning. To improve, you should aim to explore the implications of these views—such as the balance between public interest and the right to privacy—rather than focusing solely on personal preference. The conclusion is a bit repetitive, restating points already made without adding synthesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the transition 'The few people thinks that' is grammatically awkward and does not effectively signal a shift in perspective. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where 'The other feels that why photographers back of them' is syntactically broken, making the logical flow difficult to follow. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'furthermore', 'consequently') would significantly enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There is significant repetition of phrases like 'latest photos' and 'take their pictures'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'competent photographers' (professional is more standard) and 'keeping update of my childhood actors life'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and occasional collocation errors (e.g., 'ad makers offered him for advertisement shoot') limit the score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more topic-specific collocations related to media and privacy would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Some individuals thinks', 'the photographers is doing'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('I agreed that, keeping update of my childhood actors life'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of quotation marks and commas. While the meaning is usually discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage is essential.

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