Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Capturing famous people by professional photographers becomes ubiquitous in contemporary society. While some people reckon it causes a positive effect on the society, others believe it affects negatively on celebrities personnal lives and society. In my opinion I think this should be included some limitations.

We can use this trend for positive aspects in two ways. First, the picture of high society people's lifestyle keeps rest of the people motivated. For instance, most famous celebrities, politicians tend to use high standard products and move around well reputed places where majority of lower level individuals unable to reach. While looking at snapshots of happy moments of rich people, rest will be motivated and work for achieve those kinds of success. Second, many product and services can be promoted through celebrity endorsement. For example, general populace aware of not only particular essentials but also marvolous destination such as hotels, restaurants through comments of most reputed people.

In contrast, if photographers always follow famous characters, it makes adverse interference for their personnel lives. Though they are famous around the country they also prefer calm and relax lifestyle deviating from crowded and noisy surrounds. Furthemore, instesd of following the particular group of people it is worth focus on another crucial factors in the country to keep the ventures.

In conclusion, though capturing of celebrities has positive impacts for the society individually and economically, some disciplines should be maintained to overcome bad effects on famous people's lives and to enhance holistic development of the culture, education system and the values of the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the motivational aspect of celebrity lifestyles and the privacy concerns of individuals. However, the development is somewhat limited; for instance, the argument about 'other crucial factors' in the third paragraph is vague and lacks specific examples. While the position is clear, the essay would benefit from more depth in the supporting arguments to reach a higher band. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reiterates the need for balance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'First', 'Second', 'In contrast', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader through the argument. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions between sentences feel slightly abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, though the connection between the idea of 'other crucial factors' and the rest of the paragraph is weak, which slightly disrupts the logical progression of the argument. Overall, the structure is coherent and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items like 'ubiquitous', 'adverse interference', and 'holistic development'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and spelling errors, such as 'personnal' instead of 'personal', 'marvolous' instead of 'marvelous', and 'instesd' instead of 'instead'. Collocations are occasionally unnatural, such as 'high society people's lifestyle' or 'keep the ventures'. While the meaning is always clear, these errors and the limited range of sophisticated vocabulary prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'it affects negatively on celebrities personnal lives' (should be 'it negatively affects celebrities' personal lives') and 'work for achieve' (should be 'work to achieve'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in article usage and prepositional phrases. While the errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching the 7.0 band, which requires more frequent error-free sentences and better control over complex structures.

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