Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It has been observed that people with great personality and renowned in their carrier are photgraphed by press or photographers to show what they wear and their everyday chores . a group of society say it is good for us to see what they did because they a large audience and some say that this is a wrong approach for press to follow famous people in my upcoming paragraphs i will discuss both views and give my opinion.

bodyparagraph-1 , there are numerous reason in the favour of the celebrities followed by the photographers . the primary reason is the public have curiousty to know more about their interst, family and their relationship. for instance it , the news by the media of india published that the young generation who followed the famous hip hop singer sidhu moose wala their famous logo of tractor with no 5911 most purchased number by ever by the public for their vehicles.

bodyparagraph-2 , on the other hand people of society oppose on that approach because of the main reasons. first and foremost is that photographes clicked unsual with of their private life . to explain it ,sometimes the photographers clicked the pictures of famous celebrities or trying to encroach in their private life . it results , by that pictures or news they lost their relationships or public see them totally different as in their character.

in conclusion, to conclude the discussion many people want to see their role models in news to follow their lifestyles but on the other hand i personally believed the photographers have not too much freedom to clicked their pics and not to encroach their private life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The example regarding the singer Sidhu Moose Wala is somewhat tangential and not clearly linked to the broader debate about privacy versus public interest. The arguments in the second body paragraph are repetitive and lack depth, as the explanation of why photographers are 'wrong' is not fully articulated. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed reasoning and clearer examples that directly support your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the structure is mechanical and lacks sophistication. The use of 'bodyparagraph-1' and 'bodyparagraph-2' as headings is inappropriate for an essay format. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'on the other hand' and 'first and foremost', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a repetitive manner. The progression of ideas is occasionally difficult to follow due to awkward phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. Improving the use of linking words and removing informal structural labels would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several spelling errors, such as 'photgraphed', 'carrier' (instead of career), 'curiousty', and 'interst'. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'clicked unsual with of their private life'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in word formation and collocation prevent the essay from achieving a higher score. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to media, privacy, and celebrity culture, and pay closer attention to spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the public have curiousty'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'It results, by that pictures or news they lost their relationships'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors present often cause the reader to pause to decipher the intended meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, punctuation, and the correct use of verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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