Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Whilst many think that skilled photographers owe the public to account for the celebrity life style as they go about their activities. I believe they should be free to have their private life.

On the one hand, professional photographers are often considered by fans as doing their job well by publicizing and feeding the media space with the life style of a certain popular figure, it is only fair by making sure they display such individual primarily for entertainment purpose by showcasing the clothing style at that time.

Furthermore, paparazzi have been seen taking photos of some famous individual which captures some fun moment such as partying, fashion shows and during ambassador deals which can be use for advertisement and generation of revenues for entertainment industry.

Unfortunately, paparazzi on the course of discharging there duties have been seen bridging ethical boundaries, thereby revealing some private moments or intimate times. this can lead to loss of respect and even cyber bullying of some individual. For example, there are so many occasion some of the intimate moments of our celebrities have appeared on the internet space.

Also, pressures on fans that are trying to imitate such expensive life style can lead to so many into depressed state.

Despite celebrities trying to entertain fans by publicizing their pictures, their private or intimate moments should should not be shown to the public.

In conclusion, while many fans think professional photographers should publicize the life style of a famous individuals, the danger of people trying to copy such style and leading to several unhealthy issues should be considered. i suggest that private life should not be intruded.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the benefits of celebrity photography for the entertainment industry, the explanation is a bit repetitive. The discussion on the negative impact of paparazzi is relevant, but the point about fans imitating celebrities and becoming depressed is slightly underdeveloped and could have been linked more clearly to the core issue of privacy. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more specific reasoning or illustrative examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of ethical boundaries and the impact on fans. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'publicizing', 'ethical boundaries', and 'intimate moments'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'account for the celebrity life style' (instead of 'document') and 'bridging ethical boundaries' (should be 'breaching'). Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'generation of revenues'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary choices are consistently natural and accurate in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. For example, the first sentence is a sentence fragment ('Whilst many think... I believe...'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'some famous individual' (should be 'individuals') and 'the life style of a famous individuals'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas and capitalization errors. Focusing on sentence boundary control and basic grammatical accuracy will help you achieve a higher score.

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