Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this modern era, professional photographers are preferring to take photos of famous people at every place. Some individuals believe that it is a good ideas because people have an interest in their lives while others oppose it for various reasons. I will discuss both views with my own opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why celebrates followed by professional photographers at everywhere. First and foremost is, source of income, in another words professional photographs earns are heavily depend on picture of celebrities because public want to see their celebrity due to which photographers take photos and sell them at high prices to TV channels. Secondly, sometimes celebrities also pay to photographers for click photos because of publicity of their movies and sometimes they also do these thing just because they want to be active in industry.
On the other hand, following everywhere is also wrong to famous people. Firstly, no personal life, to explain it however they are celebrities and large number of people want to know more about them but they also have right to stay personal because they also have families. If everybody would follow them everywhere then they may lose their privacy. In addition, they may face thing like stress and depression just because of mixer of personal and private life. In most cases photographs also take pictures of children and family members of celebrity which is also illegal.
To conclude, although there are some benefits of taking celebrity photos everywhere, I believe that it is wrong thing which they are doing and its also illegal as well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about celebrities paying photographers is an interesting angle, but it lacks specific examples or further elaboration to make the argument more persuasive. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully summarize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your supporting points with more depth and ensure your position is clearly stated and maintained throughout the entire essay, rather than just in the final paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'Secondly', and 'In addition' to link your thoughts. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'to explain it however they are celebrities'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, which makes some sentences difficult to follow. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'celebrates' instead of 'celebrities', 'click photos' instead of 'take photographs', and 'mixer of personal and private life' instead of 'blurring the lines between personal and private life'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and occasional errors in word formation prevent a higher score. Focusing on learning collocations and more precise terminology related to media and privacy would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include 'professional photographers are preferring to take photos', 'celebrates followed by professional photographers at everywhere', and 'it is wrong thing which they are doing'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While you attempt to use complex sentences, they are often marred by errors in syntax. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.
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