Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

in this Current world , photography is necessary thing for everyone for collecting memories. Few of the people thinks that professional photographers can photograph famous people by following them while other others thinks that this is the wrong thing to follow famous people by click photograph. I will explain both of the views in further Paragraph

According to First view, famous people are photograph by which is positive thing because local people can follow their lifestyle. to explain this point, photos provide their daily routines and also about the lifestyle. For example, one of my friend was following daily routine of one celebrity and he lose his weight to follow that famous person life. Most of the people like to enjoy knowing about celebrities lives.

While others think that, follow famous people is not a good thing because they have tried to live in a privacy. To illustrate this point, by following constantly can make them uncomfortable and anxious. For instance, paparazzi continuously following one of the celebrity in India and few months later that celebrity was in trauma which is not good for her private life.

on my perspective, continuously following and taking photographs of celebrities may create dangerous situation such as uncomfortableness, lack of privacy , harassment, and safety. photography is acceptable in public places or at public events, but constantly following someone into private situations is wrong.

to conclude, local people can follow by using internet for healthy lifestyle by following celebrities lives but my arguments prove that constantly following famous people make contains worst situation for them which is wrong for their safety and personal space.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide an example of a friend losing weight, the connection to why photography is a 'good thing' for the public is not fully explored. Similarly, the second body paragraph mentions privacy concerns but lacks depth in explaining the broader societal implications. To improve, ensure that each point is supported by more detailed reasoning or a more sophisticated example. The position is clear throughout, but the overall development remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'According to First view,' 'To illustrate this point,' and 'To conclude.' However, some of these are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'According to First view' should be 'According to the first view'). The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'photography is necessary thing' instead of 'a necessary thing' and 'make contains worst situation.' You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations (e.g., 'tried to live in a privacy'). To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to media, ethics, and privacy, and pay closer attention to word forms and standard English collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles ('in this Current world'), incorrect verb forms ('other others thinks'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and sentence structure. Proofreading for basic errors like capitalization and pluralization would also significantly improve the quality of your writing.

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