Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, professional photographers take photographs of well-known people everywhere they go. Although some people say that this is a good thing as the public are keen about their lives, others believe that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. As far as I am concerned, this has postive and negative both effects.
On the one hand, they are a plethora of reasons for public are interested to know about famous people life. Firstly, many people are taking as a role models for their lives. Moreover, they want to follow their healthy habits to stay healthy looking like them. For example, in India, the superstar Mahesh Babu always he looks not only smart but also care about children health for this he established the children foundation. Furthermore, If professional photographers update their photos on postive way, it would encourages to followers to learn good things.
On the other hand, drawback is more relying on their photographs and without their permission professional photographers are posting on social media. In addition, famous people have their own personal life without intimation photographers could not take pictures of them. For instance, on Internt they are posting their family pictures or personal pictures, many people are negative commenting on this. This imact effect on famous people.
In conclusion, professional photographers take photographs of well-known people everywhere they go. many people say that this is a good thing as the public are intersted about their lives, while others believe that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. I belive, this has postive and negative both effects. Without their permission they could not se
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide an example regarding Mahesh Babu, the explanation of why photographers should or should not follow celebrities is occasionally repetitive and lacks depth. The conclusion is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full summary of your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your arguments are fully expanded with logical reasoning rather than just listing points. The final paragraph needs to be finished to ensure your position is clearly restated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'For this he established' or 'This imact effect on'. The progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors, making some sentences difficult to follow. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'this', 'they') is clear will help improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms and there are several instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'keen about their lives' (should be 'keen on'), 'taking as a role models', and 'without intimation'. Spelling errors like 'postive', 'intersted', 'Internt', and 'imact' also occur. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are natural and contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently make errors with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction, such as 'they are a plethora of reasons' and 'it would encourages to followers'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of grammatical errors is high enough to cause some distraction for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence structure and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.
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