Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Thesedays famous individuals are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Few masses say this is a good thing by which public are interested in their lives, and it create job opportunities however, few opine that photographers are wrong to follow famous people due to negative impact on youth .This passage will share both views and provide opinion.

To begin with, Hiring a personal photographer is deal for job seekers in same pathway. every corner in the world, people are obessed with pictures. Ample of people getting their degree as a personal photographer. Thus, the people will get considerable amount of money. For example, a country like “India” individuals depends on farming, due to less job. Photography is a pathway to earn bread and butter. In addition, it provides knowledge of all about the world. The famous celebrities, plan their trips in different countries and they represent the culture by wearing their clothes and pictures with famous sculptures. Such as , “ France” people wish to see the “Eifel” tower. This photographer contain all the information of place. Therefore, it fullfill the wishes for individual, especially , who cannot afford to visit the nation.

On the other hand, public feel that , anything they on social media, is real, while everything is unclear. For example “ Famous individuals use AI to edit the background from thir pictures.

After pondering over the proceding information, there is no doubt, this filed is appropriate for those, who are passionate for photography, but downside cannot be neglected.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is inconsistent. While you mention job opportunities and public interest, the arguments are often tangential or lack logical depth. For instance, the link between professional photography and the Eiffel Tower is unclear and does not directly address the ethical debate regarding privacy. Your own opinion is mentioned in the introduction but is not clearly sustained or integrated into the conclusion, which is abrupt and lacks a summary of your stance. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a clear, relevant point that directly answers the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow within them is weak. Transitions are often mechanical or misused, such as 'To begin with' followed by a point about job seekers that lacks a clear connection to the topic. Referencing is sometimes confusing, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. For example, the jump from photography as a career to the Eiffel Tower lacks a cohesive link. To improve, use linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one to create a unified argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'Few masses say' and 'Ample of people getting their degree'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'deal' instead of 'a career path' or 'pathway'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'celebrities' and 'social media', the overall range is narrow and repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary rather than relying on informal or incorrectly translated phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('individuals depends', 'photographer contain'), missing articles ('in same pathway', 'see the Eifel tower'), and punctuation errors. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors in syntax. For example, 'Thesedays famous individuals are photographed...' contains a spelling error and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex structures.

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