Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In toady's world many renowned people are photographed by paparazzi everywhere they go. some individuals believe this is good thing as public are interested in their lives and others reckon it is inappropriate action taken by the professional cameramen. Both the views will be discussed in the following paragraphs with the relevant examples.

One of the most prominent reasons why famous people may be photographed by professional photographers wherever they do in their daily lives , many youngsters are being inspired by the famous celebrities and like to know more about their favorite's person daily schedule. For instance, some teenagers follow players on the social media and they may gain knowledge about how to stay physically and mentally fit. Furthermore, not even youngsters, there are adults who like to know more about the famous people through social media pages that are handled by paparazzi, and they learn how to become goal-oriented that results in successful career. Moreover, people become aware of the new trends whether it is new clothing or food. As a result it is helpful for people to become up to date .

However, there are some people who reckon that it is not a good idea to record the popular people in their daily routines. Nowadays, crime have been increasing unprecedently and there are high risk to the lives of celebrities because almost every renowned people are being a part of controversy, and if they being digitally captured by the photographers whatever they do in their daily schedules , then may be it put direct negative effect on the mental health of famous people because they feel anxiety and danger whenever they go in the public places.

To conclude, famous people shouldnot been captured all the time they have their private lives and pr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, although the conclusion is incomplete. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of celebrities on youth and the potential risks to privacy and mental health. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, the link between paparazzi photos and career success is a bit tenuous and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should ensure your conclusion is fully developed and that your arguments are more logically connected to the prompt. The abrupt ending significantly impacts the overall task completion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'However' to transition between ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between paparazzi photos and learning to be 'goal-oriented' is not well-explained. Additionally, the essay ends abruptly mid-sentence, which disrupts the flow and coherence of the final paragraph. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, completed thought would enhance the score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'renowned', 'prominent', 'unprecedently', and 'controversy'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'favorite's person' instead of 'favorite person' and 'record the popular people' instead of 'photograph celebrities'. Some spelling errors, like 'toady's' instead of 'today's', also occur. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. To improve, focus on learning collocations and refining your spelling of common academic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('crime have been increasing', 'every renowned people are being'), incorrect verb forms ('if they being digitally captured'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound. Proofreading for small errors like missing articles or incorrect verb tenses would be highly beneficial.

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