Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent days, Celebrities are center of attraction every were they go, and photojournalists click their pictures, and upload that on magazins and social media platforms. However, people share different views for that, which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs.

On one side of the coin, common people are so interested in famous people's life, and they follow their routine and lifestyle. moreover, paparazzos follows them for their magazin and instagram content followed and liked by people. Because they influence people photographer share each and every steps of the day of public figure with public. for instance, Akshay Kumar he is the famous movie star of India, he is known for his good physic and stunts, people follow his healthy routine.

On the other side of the coin, it is wrong to follow famous people, because when they come out from their mentions photographers follow them and click picture and upload them everywhere with people. What is more, it ruin privacy of celebrity, as a result celebrities can not freely wander outside of their house with their family like normal people. For instance, famous comedian Samay Raina was just talking with a contasted of his show and professional photographer click the picture and spread the news that they both are dating.

To conclude, every individual has right for their privacy, like normal people celebrities also need time for themselves. Following them every where is ruin their freedom. In my view, professional photographer should respect celebrities privacy and they should not share news without their concern.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that the public is interested in celebrities, the explanation is brief and relies on a single example. Similarly, the argument regarding privacy is relevant but could be expanded with more depth regarding the ethical implications. The response is balanced, but the supporting points lack the necessary detail to reach a higher band. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph fully explores the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments rather than just stating them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'On one side of the coin' and 'To conclude', which are helpful. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions are slightly awkward, such as 'moreover, paparazzos follows them for their magazin and instagram content followed and liked by people.' The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. However, there are several spelling errors ('magazins', 'physic' instead of 'physique', 'contasted' instead of 'contestant') and some word choice issues ('every were' instead of 'everywhere', 'without their concern' instead of 'without their consent'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure you proofread for common spelling mistakes and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder the flow. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('paparazzos follows'), article usage ('the famous movie star'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For example, 'For instance, Akshay Kumar he is the famous movie star...' is grammatically incorrect. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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