Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary era , populated individuals are photographed by good photographers everywhere they go. Mostly people believe that this is a good thing as everyone is interested in their living. while, others say that taking pictures is wrong of famous people . Therefore, ahead of my opinion, both the views will be discussed further.

Examining the former opinion , The primary argument is that people think that individuals can know about about well known people lifestyle how they are living by clicking their pictures. In addition, also with this thing other people get the inspiration by seeing them successful. To exemplify this, youngsters get the idea while seeing them how they are working hard in their live daily so adults also get the way how they have to work or get the knowledge about the field they are interested.

on the contrary, those who are in the favour of the latter opinion have their own arguments. To begin with they claim that photographs are wrong because with these famous people not get their privacy everything is public. Moreover, sometimes well know people not have enough time to click the pictures that have to go somewhere on time with these things they might get late on their way. For instance , if someone goes on their work time to time and professional photographers might clicking their pictures they get late on work.

To conclude, there are convincing arguments both for and against . However, i certainly favour the former opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the argument regarding 'inspiration' is somewhat vague and lacks a clear connection to the topic of photography. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or reinforce the opinion provided. To improve, you should aim to extend your arguments with more specific examples and ensure that your position is clearly maintained and supported throughout the entire essay, rather than just stated at the end.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Therefore, ahead of my opinion' and 'with these things they might get late' are awkward and hinder the flow of ideas. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of unnatural word choices, such as 'populated individuals' instead of 'celebrities' or 'famous people', and 'living' used as a noun to mean 'lifestyle'. The phrasing 'click the pictures' is repetitive and informal. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'public figures', 'invasion of privacy', or 'media scrutiny', rather than relying on basic, repetitive vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'well know people not have'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'taking pictures is wrong of famous people'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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