Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that professional photographers often takes pics of celebrities which find some poeple as good things where as few other individuals considered this as bad. This essay will discussed both the perspectives in the ensuing paragraph and followed by the writers thought.

To begin with, most people every day uses social media and find themeselves putting story of grat pic of their celebrity which was taken by some random paprazzi during his travelling time. To explicate, Indian celebrity Shahrukh Khan he donot go much in public, so his fans cannot have much photo with him and during his birthdays or his new film release most people post his photo taken by photographer and wishes him. Moreover, it is good for the people because sometimes a celebrity follows daily timetable for his daily activities as well as famous person always need to fit for the seen that is needed in action films. To exemplify, People mostly follow Ajay devgan and all know the he will present at this time in this gym so that results into seeing the people more systematic person for his personal and mental fitness.

On the other hand, sometimes photgrapher disturbs the personal privacy of the celebrity becuase at last they also have family, they go out on trip and somebody gives tip to the photographer and that results in disturbing moments for them as well. To be add on this, most celebrity sometimes make their trip away from their know audience. For instance, recent incident with Ali khan, he was very popular actor in his action film, but in jan 2026 he went with his family on vacation at Miami beach and their his wife was wearing bikini and they belongs to muslim. So, some random photographer took their pic and posted on social media within 2 days he was banned from his society muslim community and he was kicked out on immediate basis form the film that wass shooting at the time.

To sum up, both the views has its own pros and cons, but the photographer should be aware about the pic they are taking and they should also not interrupt their personal life, if they are doing and mainting this, I consider this as good thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student addresses both parts of the prompt (the benefits of celebrity photography and the intrusions/wrongdoings of paparazzi) and presents a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Ideas are extended with examples, such as the references to Shahrukh Khan and Ajay Devgan, although some of the supporting details veer into overly specific or confusing narratives (e.g., the anecdote about Ali Khan). There is a tendency to over-generalise and some ideas lack tight focus, but the task is sufficiently answered overall. This performance aligns best with the Band 6 descriptors, as the prompt is addressed with relevant ideas, though some parts are slightly under-developed or unclear.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing opposing views, and a concluding summary. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or faulty, such as 'To be add on this' and awkward transitional phrases. Referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., pronouns like 'he' or 'they' sometimes lack a precise antecedent). Progression is discernible, but minor lapses in logical flow prevent a higher score. This fits the Band 6 level well, where the arrangement is coherent overall, but cohesion features noticeable flaws.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'paparazzi', 'systematic person', and 'personal privacy'. However, there are numerous word choice, collocation, and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'pics', 'poeple', 'discussed', 'themseves', 'grat pic', 'photgrapher', and 'becuase'. These errors do not severely impede communication because the writer's intent remains clear, but they restrict the lexical score. This performance reflects Band 5, as the vocabulary is adequate to communicate basic ideas, but noticeable errors in spelling and word choice cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('photographers often takes', 'celebrity Shahrukh Khan he donot go'), tense inconsistencies ('this essay will discussed'), and awkward phrasing ('both the views has its own pros and cons'). While these errors do not completely obscure the message, they occur with enough frequency to impact readability. This corresponds to a Band 5 score, characterised by a limited range of structures and frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader.

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