Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is undeniable to say that in this contemporary era, majority of celebrities are being recorded by photographers. Some people think that it is a postive thing to get to know their lifestyle whereas, others are disagree with this notion. I will explore both these views along with my opinion in following paragraphs.

To begin with, first of all, no doubt people love to know about the lifestyle of people whom they admire in that case taking a photographs is a vaild reason. Sometimes people spend alots of money just to see their favourite star so if they get photos everyday they don't need to go to see tham personly. After that taking pictures or show what famous people has their routine look like to others is a part of their job that they have to do at any how. Also, due to this people will more up to date what is going on in the industry.

On the other hand, while following them all the time has dire consequences especially, for celebrities. Basically, they feel that they lose their freedom while in public places. However, sometimes checking up all the time leads to some serious problems such as if someone knows that where they are bad intention people may hurt them easily. Morover, it also may effect their peronal or you can say their leisure time.

To Cap it all, i can say that no doubt it is a good thing at some how but it has some drawbacks that cannot be ignored. In my opinion it is a negative thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on celebrity photography and providing a clear personal opinion. The writer establishes an initial position in the introduction ('In my opinion it is a negative thing') and maintains it through to the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the arguments regarding public interest and paparazzi being part of their job are presented generally without deep extension or specific supporting examples. Phrases such as 'people spend alots of money just to see their favourite star' touch on valid points, but the reasoning remains underdeveloped. Consequently, the response aligns best with Band 6 descriptors, as it addresses all parts of the task with relevant ideas, though some aspects lack sufficient elaboration.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph-by-paragraph structure, moving logically from an introduction to body paragraphs discussing each view, and finally a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. The writer relies heavily on basic transitional markers such as 'To begin with, first of all', 'After that', and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, notably with vague pronouns like 'due to this people will more up to date' and 'show what famous people has their routine look like'. These mechanical cohesive devices and occasional awkward transitions place the response firmly in Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic ideas about fame and privacy. There are attempts to use less common items and phrases, such as 'contemporary era', 'dire consequences', and 'leisure time'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'postive' instead of positive, 'alots' instead of a lot, 'vaild' instead of valid, 'tham personly' instead of them personally, and 'effect' instead of affect. While these errors do not severely impede overall communication, they demonstrate frequent inaccuracies in spelling and word formation, which prevents the score from reaching Band 6.5 or higher, making Band 5.5 a fair reflection of the lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating clauses with 'because', 'whereas', and relative pronouns. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors occurring across most sentences. Examples include 'It is undeniable to say that... majority of celebrities' (missing articles), 'others are disagree with this notion' (incorrect verb form), 'at any how' (incorrect idiom), 'takes a photographs' (article error), and 'bad intention people' (incorrect adjective form). These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader, although meaning can still be discerned. This performance fits the Band 5 descriptor for grammatical accuracy.

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