Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In my opinion, I personally think that media should not follow big celebrities private movements like where they go, whome they meet, why they went on this shop, why they are travelling, whom they are dating. These are private movements and media should not show these on big screens as this may affect there mental health. I have seen lot of big party put stories on social platform like instagram about not to explore there personal life.

On the one hand, Few citizens believe that making videos of superstar life gives people information about their living style. Furthermore, Many individuals love to follow celebritities routine. For instance, Haily biber she is a business women and a model though number of teenager follow her beauty schedule not only this but when she step outside people notice her clothing style and afterwards everyone will copy her designs.

On the second hand, some folks thinks that photographer should not follow them everywhere which i believe is good point in terms of if they are dealing with social issues like court or police station matter, media should not chase them. To add more, i remember the time when famous cricketer went for his trip to london to spent some relax time he noticed many residence were making video of him which make him leave the place so this kind of behaviour is not a good manners.

In conclusion, considering all the points mentioned above i strongly think that media should stay away from celebrities personal life and let them enjoy there personal time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on celebrity photography and providing a clear personal opinion. The writer's position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and relies heavily on personal anecdotes rather than fully extended arguments. For instance, the example of Hailey Bieber touches on lifestyle influence, but the explanation remains brief and slightly repetitive. While the main points are relevant, they lack the depth expected for higher band levels. Overall, the task is adequately addressed, earning a solid Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. The transitional phrases used, such as 'On the second hand' (an incorrect idiom) and 'To add more,' detract from the natural flow of ideas. Referencing and pronoun use are occasionally unclear, such as shifting subjects abruptly. Paragraphing is present and separates the opposing views appropriately, but the lack of smooth, sophisticated cohesive devices keeps this criterion at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but it lacks range and precision. The student uses basic or repetitive terms such as 'big celebrities', 'private movements', and 'things'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, including 'private movements' instead of 'private moments', 'whome' instead of 'whom', and 'relax time' instead of 'relaxing time'. Attempts at less common vocabulary result in inaccuracies. While communication is generally maintained despite these errors, the lexical limitations restrict the score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('folks thinks'), missing articles ('went for his trip'), and punctuation errors throughout. Complex structures are often faulty, such as 'she is a business women and a model though number of teenager follow her beauty schedule'. These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5.0 performance.

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